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You work for an international company and would like to spend six months working in its head office in another country. Write a letter to your manager explain why you want to work in the company's head offoce for 6 months say how your work could be done while you are away. Ask for his or her help in arranging it.

You work for an international company and would like to spend six months working in its head office in another country. Write a letter to your manager explain why you want to work in the company's head offoce for 6 months say how your work could be done while you are away. Ask for his or her help in arranging it. pOlL
Dear sir, I am writing to request your kind permission for my transfer to the head office in Nigeria for the next six months. Working in the company's head office for some months has always been my dream and with the recent completion of my masters degree in public administration, it will be a good opportunity to expand my work experience, improve my skills and also gain new knowledge on job responsibilities of a Human Resource Executive for a large team. My present work duties will not be left unattended as i intend to temporarily hand over to my subordinate and ask to be contacted if any problem arises. I hope my request will not inconvenience you too much and humbly request your assistance with the paperwork necessary to effect the transfer. Thanks in advance for your kind cooperation. Yours Faithfully, Raimi Azeezat
Dear sir, I am writing to request your kind permission for my transfer to the head office in Nigeria for the
next
six months.

Working in the
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company
's head office for
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some
months has always been my dream and with the recent completion of my
For an academic degree, use "master’s".
masters
degree in public administration, it will be a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
opportunity to expand my work experience,
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
improve
my
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
skills
and
also
gain new knowledge on job responsibilities of a Human Resource Executive for a large team.

My present work duties will not be
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
left
unattended as
Is this the personal pronoun "I"? It is spelled uppercase.
i
intend to
temporarily
hand over to my subordinate and ask to
be contacted
if any problem arises.

I hope my request will not inconvenience you too much and
humbly
request your assistance with the paperwork necessary to effect the transfer.

Thanks in advance for your kind cooperation.

Yours
Faithfully
,
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Raimi
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Azeezat

IELTS letter You work for an international company and would like to spend six months working in its head office in another country. Write a letter to your manager explain why you want to work in the company's head offoce for 6 months say how your work could be done while you are away. Ask for his or her help in arranging it.

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