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You work for an international company, and would like to spend six months working in its head office in another country. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter: explain why you want to work in the company’s head office for six months say how your work could be done while you are away ask for his/her help in arranging it,

Dear sir I am writing to request that you accept my work as a head office in your company in France for the next six months As you know, the actual director has some health problems thus he would not be able to do his job for at least half a year. Because of that, I want to travel to Paris and do the labor. The reason of this decision is the great opportinity to evolve my self and go on with my career. further, I would like to ipmrove my skills in franch langage. About my actual duties, my assistant Merry could organize all the chores while am away. hence I well contact her daily and give her all the aid she needs. I hope you will admit my request. I will apreciate all the help you migh give it to me to organize this task. I am looking foraward to hearing from you yours sincerelly

Dear sir

I am writing to request that you accept my work as a head office in your This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :enterprisecorporation
company
 in France for the next
 six months

As you know, the actual director has This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:a number of
some
 health problems thus
 he would not be able to do his job for at least half a year. This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:due to the factin light of the fact thatowing to the fact that
Because
 of that, I want to travel to Paris and do the labor. The reason of this decision is the great opportinity to evolve my self and go on with my career. further
, I would like to ipmrove my This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :proficiencies
skills
 in franch langage.

About my actual duties, my assistant Merry could organize all the chores while am away. hence
 I well contact her daily and give her all the aid she needs.

I hope you will admit my request.

I will apreciate all the This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :assistassistance
help
 you migh give it to me to organize this task.

I am looking foraward to hearing from you

yours sincerelly

IELTS letter You work for an international company, and would like to spend six months working in its head office in another country. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter: explain why you want to work in the company’s head office for six months say how your work could be done while you are away ask for his/her help in arranging it,

Letter

American English

8 paragraphs

156 words

6.0

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5

Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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One main idea per paragraph
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Include an introduction and conclusion
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Support main points with an explanation and then an example
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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Vary your linking phrases using synonyms

Lexical Resource: 6.5

Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes

Grammatical Range: 6.5

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
Check your writing for errors

Task Achievement: 7.0

Answer all parts of the question
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Present relevant ideas
Fully explain these ideas
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Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

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