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You are going to another country to study. You would like to do a part-time job while you are studying, so you want to ask a friend who lives there for some help. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter, give details of your study plans explain why you want to get a part-time job suggest how your friend could help you find a job

Hi Steve, I hope that you and your family is in the pink of health. As you know, I have applied to the University of Toronto for my PG course. I got accepted to the university and I am coming to Canada next month. I will be staying there for two years till the course ends. Since my family could not afford for my studies, I am planning to take a part-time job there. This will immensely help me for my semester fees and for my living. I can work in the evening shifts or an early morning shifts, which does not affect my classes. I know that you are working as a manager in a restaurant. I would like to take up any job in the same restaurant as yours. Please consider my request and let me know if any vacancies are available in the restaurant you work. I am eagerly waiting for your reply and I appreciate your effort. See you soon, Grace

Hi Steve,

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got
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accepted
 to the university and I am coming to Canada next
 month. I will be staying there for two years till the course ends.

Since my family could not afford for my studies, I am planning to take a part-time job there. This will immensely
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :assistassistance
help
 me for my semester fees and for my living. I can work in the evening shifts or an early morning shifts, which does not affect my classes.

I know that you are working as a manager in a restaurant. I would like to take up any job in the same restaurant as yours. This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :satisfy
Please
 consider my request and This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :authorize
let
 me know if any vacancies are available in the restaurant you work.

I am eagerly
 waiting for your reply and I appreciate your effort.

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See
 you This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:in the near future
soon
,

Grace

IELTS letter You are going to another country to study. You would like to do a part-time job while you are studying, so you want to ask a friend who lives there for some help. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter, give details of your study plans explain why you want to get a part-time job suggest how your friend could help you find a job

Letter

American English

7 paragraphs

164 words

6.0

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5

Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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One main idea per paragraph
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Include an introduction and conclusion
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Support main points with an explanation and then an example
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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Vary your linking phrases using synonyms

Lexical Resource: 6.5

Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes

Grammatical Range: 6.5

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
Check your writing for errors

Task Achievement: 7.0

Answer all parts of the question
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Present relevant ideas
Fully explain these ideas
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Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

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