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You work for an international company, and would like to spend six months working in its head office in another country. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter • explain why you want to work in the company's head office for six months • say how your work could be done while you are away • ask for his/her help in arranging it

You work for an international company, and would like to spend six months working in its head office in another country. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter • explain why you want to work in the company's head office for six months • say how your work could be done while you are away • ask for his/her help in arranging it 9gxw
Dear Sir, I am Disha. I am working as a senior accountant in our company. I write this latter to working in out head office which is located overseas. I want to at our head office because I learn more in accounting. As you know that there are many difference in Indian and Foreign Accounting systems. Due to that both countries use different programs. Consequently I would to like to go their for at least six months. I assure you that while working their my work will not suffer. Because I put my assistance to complete all the work during that time. And I will check their all done work on day to day basis. Consequently it is great that if you get the permission from higher authorities. Also tell that i am going for our company's better future. So it is very help full to our company in future. Yours faithfully, Disha Mirani
Dear Sir,

I am
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Disha
. I am working as a senior accountant in our
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company
.
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I
write this latter to working in out head office which
is located
overseas.

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I
want to at our head office
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because
I learn more in accounting. As you know that there are
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many difference
in Indian and Foreign Accounting systems. Due to that both countries
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use
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different
programs.
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Consequently
I would to like to go their for at least six months.

I assure you that while working their my work will not suffer.
“Because” at the beginning of a sentence usually requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
Because
I put my assistance to complete all the work during that time. And I will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
check
their all done work on
It appears that two hyphens are missing.
day to day
basis.

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Consequently
it is great that if you
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
the permission from higher authorities.
Also
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tell
that
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i
am going for our
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company
's better future.
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So
it is
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very
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help
full to our
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company
Did you mean: "in the future"?
in future
.

Yours
faithfully
,

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Disha
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Mirani

IELTS letter You work for an international company, and would like to spend six months working in its head office in another country. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter • explain why you want to work in the company's head office for six months • say how your work could be done while you are away • ask for his/her help in arranging it

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  American English
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153 words
6.0
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