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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. Write a letter to your Team Leader that you wouldn’t be attending a product presentation as it is your best friend’s wedding. Write at least 150 words.

Write a letter to your Team Leader that you wouldn’t be attending a product presentation as it is your best friend’s wedding. Gbqw
Dear Mr Choi, I am writing to request for not attending the product presentation which will be held next Friday night. It should be a memorable moment for our whole team to exhibit the product which we have been established for a whole year. I really want to take part in the presentation originally and share the happiness with my colleagues. Unfortunately, there will be a wedding ceremony held at the same moment. This ceremony is held by my best friend, who I encountered for more than 30 years. It is really an important moment for him, and there will not be another chance for me to share this moment with him. Consequently, I sincerely hope you can accept my absence in the presentation. I hope I can hear a positive response from you. I am looking forward to hearing from you soon. Yours sincerely, John Doe
Dear Mr
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Choi
,

I am writing to request for not attending the product presentation which will
be held
next
Friday night.

It should be a memorable
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
moment
for our whole team to exhibit the product which we have
been established
for a whole year. I
really
want to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
take part
in the presentation
originally
and share the happiness with my colleagues.

Unfortunately, there will be a wedding ceremony held at the same
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
moment
. This ceremony
is held
by my best friend, who I encountered for more than 30 years. It is
really
an
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
important
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
moment
for him, and there will not be another chance for me to share this
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
moment
with him.
Consequently
, I
sincerely
hope you can accept my absence in the presentation.

I hope I can hear a
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
positive
response from you. I am looking forward to hearing from you
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
soon
.

Yours
sincerely
,

John Doe

IELTS letter Write a letter to your Team Leader that you wouldn’t be attending a product presentation as it is your best friend’s wedding.

Letter
  American English
7 paragraphs
146 words
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less than 250 words in Task 2
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4.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Lexical Resource: 6.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 6.5
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