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Your child is going on a school trip abroad for three days and the headmaster of the school has asked any parents if they would like to come along to assist. You would like to go. Write a letter to the headmaster. In your letter: Say why you would like to go Suggest what you could do to help during the trip Ask some further questions about the trip

Your child is going on a school trip abroad for three days and the headmaster of the school has asked any parents if they would like to come along to assist. You would like to go. Write a letter to the headmaster. In your letter: Say why you would like to go Suggest what you could do to help during the trip Ask some further questions about the trip VGxA
Dear Sir I am writing this letter to ensure my presence to a 3 day trip to China with my child, Sam. I want to share ideas and enquire details of information about this trip. I appreciate that you have allowed parents to accompany children on this trip because all parents are skeptical of sending their child to a foreign country all on their own. I am sure teachers do look after children but they certainly cannot look after every child and since parents are fully aware of their children’s habits, it is easier to look after their daily needs. I have heard that Sam has some friends whose parents are not able to accompany them to trip, I have talked to their parents and assured them that I will look after these three kids and make sure they have a good learning experience as well as a fun time. I hope I am able to offer you help in this way on this trip Lastly, please share the accommodation details and tour details such as the hotel we are going to stay in and the places children will visit in China, as it will become easier for me to update other families about their children as well. I look forward to hear from you. Sincerely, Mehreen
Dear Sir

I am writing this letter to ensure my presence to a
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3 day
trip to China with my child, Sam. I want to share
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ideas
and
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enquire
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details
of information about this trip.

I appreciate that you have
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allowed
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parents
to accompany
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children
on this trip
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because
all
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parents
are skeptical of sending their child to a foreign country all on their
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own
.
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I
am sure teachers do
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look
after
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children
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but
they
certainly
cannot
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look
after every child and since
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parents
are
fully
aware of their
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children’s
habits, it is easier to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
look
after their daily needs.

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I
have heard that Sam has
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some
friends whose
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parents
are not able to accompany them to trip, I have talked to their
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parents
and assured them that I will
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look
after these three kids and
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make
sure they have a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
learning experience
as well
as a fun time.
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
hope I am able to offer you
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help
in this way on this trip

Lastly
,
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please
share the accommodation
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details
and tour
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
details
such as the hotel we are going to stay in and the places
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
children
will visit in China, as it will become easier for me to update other families about their
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
children
as well
.

Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
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look
forward
In the grammatical structure 'look + forward + to + verb', the verb 'to' is used with the gerund: "to hearing".
to hear
from you.

Sincerely
,

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Mehreen
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IELTS letter Your child is going on a school trip abroad for three days and the headmaster of the school has asked any parents if they would like to come along to assist. You would like to go. Write a letter to the headmaster. In your letter: Say why you would like to go Suggest what you could do to help during the trip Ask some further questions about the trip

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  American English
6 paragraphs
216 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
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Grammatical Range: 5.5
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  • Check your writing for errors
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    Present relevant ideas
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