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You work for an international company. You have seen an advertisement for a training course which will be useful for your job. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter describe the training course you want to do, explain what the company could do to help you, say how the course will be useful for your job

Dear Sir or Madam, This is Reza Alikhani, the junior marketing executive of your department. I am writing you in order to express my interest in the course of marketing of new product and services which will be held in the next month. I have seen on the advertisement, which has been put on the website, that one of the world-class professors of the mentioned topic is coming to our company to deliver that course. The topic itself and the subtopics have grabbed my attention into the course since they are extremely relevant to what I am doing in the company. Therefore, I am asking for your permission to register for the course. As it is mentioned in the advertisement, the course is not free. However, I am informed by the teaching department that there is some scholarship for certain candidates. In addition, apparently, in order to participate in the classes, we need to have the company’s permission for one week off. Here I would like to kindly ask you to consider me for the scholarship granted by the company for the registration fee of the course. Moreover, this will be a great help if I can have another colleague support me during my one week of absence. In the end, I should mention that my participation in this course will greatly benefit the corporation by teaching me the newest methods of marketing and development of new product and services. This is mostly because of my responsibility in the new project of the company in South Africa in which I oversee marketing of a new product that is going to be launched in there next year. Despite this specific project, the knowledge and techniques which are attainable during this course, will surly improve my skills for the upcoming projects of the company. Thank you in advance and looking forward to hearing from you soon. Yours sincerely,
Dear Sir or Madam,

This is Reza
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Alikhani
, the junior
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marketing
executive of your department. I am writing you in order to express my interest in the
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course
of
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marketing
of
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new
product and services which will
be held
in the
next
month. I have
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seen
on the advertisement, which has
been put
on the website, that one of the world-
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class
professors of the mentioned topic is coming to our
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company
to deliver that
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course
. The topic itself and the subtopics have grabbed my attention into the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
course
since they are
extremely
relevant to what I am doing in the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
company
.
Therefore
, I am asking for your permission to register for the course.

As it
is mentioned
in the advertisement, the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
course
is not free.
However
, I
am informed
by the teaching department that there is
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some
scholarship for certain candidates.
In addition
,
apparently
, in order to participate in the classes, we need to have the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
company’s
permission for one week off. Here I would like to kindly ask you to consider me for the scholarship granted by the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
company
for the registration fee of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
course
.
Moreover
, this will be a great
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
if I can have another colleague support me during my one week of absence.

In the
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end
, I should mention that my participation in this
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
course
will
greatly
benefit the corporation by teaching me the newest methods of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
marketing
and development of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
new
product and services. This is
mostly
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because
of my responsibility in the
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new
project of the
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company
in South Africa in which I oversee
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marketing
of a
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new
product
that is
going to
be launched
in
Did you mean “their”?
there
next
year. Despite this specific project, the knowledge and techniques which are attainable during this
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
course
, will surly
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
improve
my
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
skills
for the upcoming projects of the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
company
.

Thank you in advance and looking forward to hearing from you
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soon
.

Yours
sincerely
,
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IELTS letter You work for an international company. You have seen an advertisement for a training course which will be useful for your job. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter describe the training course you want to do, explain what the company could do to help you, say how the course will be useful for your job

Letter
  American English
6 paragraphs
316 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.5
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    Present relevant ideas
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