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You work for an in the international company. you have seen an advertisement for a training course which will be useful for your job. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter . Describe the training course you want to do. explain what the company could do to help you. . say how the course will be useful for your job.

I am writing this letter to express my interest in attending an important two-month training course entitled ‘modern marketing’ which will held in London next month. To begin with, as a marketing manager, I evaluated financial documents and found that sales of the company's products had declined over the past few months. In my opinion, one of the reasons for the company's sales decline is that the products are not properly introduced to customers and need more new marketing and advertising methods. Therefore, this course can contribute to learn new marketing techniques to some extent. in this course, I will attend marketing sessions and also talk to some consultants about the company's recent problems. I strongly believe this course can help the company grow and sell better products in the near future. On top of that, I would appreciate if you could approve my request and Pay for this course. I look forward to hearing from you. Your faithfully, Anna Martin.
I am writing this letter to express my interest in attending an
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two-month training
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entitled ‘modern
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which will held in London
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month.

To
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begin
with, as a
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marketing
manager, I evaluated financial documents and found that sales of the
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company
's products had declined over the past few months. In my opinion, one of the reasons for the
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company
's sales decline is that the products are not
properly
introduced to customers and need more new
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marketing
and advertising methods.
Therefore
, this
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course
can contribute to learn new
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marketing
techniques to
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some
extent.
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in
this
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course
, I will attend
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marketing
sessions and
also
talk to
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some
consultants about the
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company
's recent problems. I
strongly
believe this
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course
can
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help
the
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company
grow and sell better products in the near future.

On top of that
, I would appreciate if you could approve my request and Pay for this course.

I look forward to hearing from you.

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Your
faithfully
,

Anna Martin.

IELTS letter You work for an in the international company. you have seen an advertisement for a training course which will be useful for your job. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter. Describe the training course you want to do. explain what the company could do to help you. . say how the course will be useful for your job.

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