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You work for an in the international company. you have seen an advertisement for a training course which will be useful for your job. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter . Describe the training course you want to do. explain what the company could do to help you. . say how the course will be useful for your job.

I am writing this letter to express my interest in attending an important two-month training course entitled ‘modern marketing’ in London. To begin with, as a marketing manager, by evaluating the financial documents I realized that sales of the company's product have been decreased in the last few months. in my opinion the products are not properly introduced to the customers and need to the new marketing ways. Therefore, the course can help me familiar with new methods of marketing and contribute to company progress. in this course I try to interact with other companies to introduce the company and attract more investments. In addition, I participate in marketing-related sessions and and I talk to a few consultants about the company's recent problems. I strongly believe this course can help the company grow and sell better products in the near future. I would appreciate if you could approve my request and I look forward to hearing from you. Your faithfully, Anna Martin.
I am writing this letter to express my interest in attending an
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two-month training
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entitled ‘modern
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marketing’
in London.

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begin
with, as a
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marketing
manager, by evaluating the financial documents I realized that sales of the
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company
's product have
been decreased
in the last few months.
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in
my opinion the products are not
properly
introduced to the customers and need to the new
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marketing
ways.
Therefore
, the
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course
can
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help
me familiar with new methods of
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marketing
and contribute to
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company
progress.
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in
this
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course
I try to interact with other
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companies
to introduce the
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company
and attract more investments.
In addition
, I participate in marketing-related sessions
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and and
I talk to a few consultants about the
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company
's recent problems. I
strongly
believe this
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course
can
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help
the
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company
grow and sell better products in the near future.

I would appreciate if you could approve my request and I look forward to hearing from you.

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Your
faithfully
,

Anna Martin.

IELTS letter You work for an in the international company. you have seen an advertisement for a training course which will be useful for your job. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter. Describe the training course you want to do. explain what the company could do to help you. . say how the course will be useful for your job.

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