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you work at home and have a problem with a piece of equipment that you use for your job

you work at home and have a problem with a piece of equipment that you use for your job QpV3
Dear Sir, I am writing to you this letter because I have an issue with the keyboard that I have bought from your company last week. Actually, I am a sales representative and I am working from home. The keyboard starts functioning for a few minutes then it gets jammed, I need to fill in some reports and this affects badly my productivity at work, I can’t even write emails to my customers. For this reason, I am asking you to send me a new one to the adress where you have delivered the keyboard to me before, it says in the contract that I have three months guarantee. I hope from you to send me a new one in the nearest future. Thanks in avance. Yours faithfully
Dear Sir,

I am writing to you this letter
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because
I have an issue with the keyboard that I have
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bought
from your
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company
last week.

Actually, I am a sales
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representative and
I am working from home. The keyboard
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starts
functioning for a few minutes then it
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
gets
jammed, I need to fill in
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some
reports and this affects
badly
my productivity at work, I can’t even write emails to my customers.

For this reason
, I am asking you to
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send
me a new one to the
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adress
where you have delivered the keyboard to me
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before
, it says in the contract that I have three months guarantee.

I hope from you to
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send
me a new one in the nearest future.

Thanks in
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avance
.

Yours
faithfully
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IELTS letter you work at home and have a problem with a piece of equipment that you use for your job

Letter
  American English
7 paragraphs
127 words
This writing has been penalized,
text can't be
less than 250 words in Task 2
and less than 150 words in Task 1
5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Lexical Resource: 6.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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