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Your child is going on a 3-day educational trip to another country. The head teacher wants to find parents to go with the group and you would like to go. Write a letter to the head teacher. In the letter, you should tell: – why you would like to go on the trip – suggest what you could do to help during the trip – ask other questions about the trip

Your child is going on a 3-day educational trip to another country. The head teacher wants to find parents to go with the group and you would like to go. Write a letter to the head teacher. In the letter, you should tell: – why you would like to go on the trip – suggest what you could do to help during the trip – ask other questions about the trip Mgma

Dear Sir, I am penning down this letter to inform you that I am interested to join the educational trip organised for the school students to NASA. My child studies in the sixth grade in your school, his name is Anhad. He is also going on this trip, but, he has asthma and his doctor suggested that he should be accompanied by one of the family members. So it would be easier for me to look after him. Moreover, I have also visited NASA few years back during my college tour, therefore, I am much aware about the Research centre as well as other nearby places. I would like to know what we need to bring with us and the total cost of the trip including supplementary charges. I would be delighted if I would get the opportunity to become a part of this trip. Waiting for a positive response from you Thanks and Regards, Kiran

Dear Sir,

I am penning down this letter to inform you that I am interested
 to This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :consolidatefuse
join
 the educational trip Possible spelling mistake. 'organised' is British English.organized
organised
 for the school students to NASA.

My child studies in the sixth grade in your school, his name is Possible spelling mistake found.An had
Anhad
. He is also
 going on this trip, This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:on the contrary
but
, he has asthma and his doctor suggested that he should be accompanied
 by one of the family members. This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:consequently
So
 it would be easier for me to look after him. Moreover
, I have also
 visited NASA few years back during my college tour, therefore
, I am much aware about the Research Possible spelling mistake. 'centre' is British English.center
centre
as well
 as other nearby places.

I would like to know what we need to bring with us and the total cost of the trip including supplementary charges. I would be delighted
 if I would This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :acquire
get
 the opportunity to become a part of this trip.

Waiting for a This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:beneficial
positive
 response from you

Thanks and Regards,

Kiran

IELTS letter Your child is going on a 3-day educational trip to another country. The head teacher wants to find parents to go with the group and you would like to go. Write a letter to the head teacher. In the letter, you should tell: – why you would like to go on the trip – suggest what you could do to help during the trip – ask other questions about the trip

Letter

American English

7 paragraphs

155 words

6.0

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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One main idea per paragraph
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Include an introduction and conclusion
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Support main points with an explanation and then an example
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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Vary your linking phrases using synonyms

Lexical Resource: 5.5

Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes

Grammatical Range: 6.5

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
Check your writing for errors

Task Achievement: 5.0

Answer all parts of the question
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Present relevant ideas
Fully explain these ideas
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Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

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