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You will visit a historic museum

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Dear aziza komilovnaI'm shahnoza who yesterday called you by telephone. The reason for composing this letter is to apply about the fact that i am going to take my students on a field trip to a museum. For a long time my pupils bored from school's subjects. As a history teacher, i want to make them aware of what has happened in our history. It is necessary to broaden the worldwiew of the student in the way. We should try to bruth up of students. They can distinguish today and the past by seeing things in a museum. I ask you that would be glad if you make a discount for the students which would be a great help for the pupils. I am looking forward to meeting you on 22 July. Best regards shahnoza
Dear
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aziza
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komilovnaI
'm
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shahnoza
who yesterday called you by telephone. The reason for composing this letter is to apply about the fact that
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i
am going to take my
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students
on a field trip to a museum. For a long time my pupils bored from school's subjects. As a history teacher,
Is this the personal pronoun "I"? It is spelled uppercase.
i
want to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
them aware of what has happened in our history. It is necessary to broaden the
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worldwiew
of the
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student
in the way. We should try to
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bruth
up of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
students
. They can distinguish
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
today
and the past by seeing things in a museum. I ask you that would be glad if you
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
a discount for the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
students
which would be a great
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
for the pupils. I am looking forward to meeting you on 22 July. Best regards
Please add a punctuation mark at the end of paragraph
shahnoza
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IELTS letter You will visit a historic museum

Letter
  American English
1 paragraphs
134 words
This writing has been penalized,
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less than 250 words in Task 2
and less than 150 words in Task 1
5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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