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You will go to a foreign country to stay there for one year, and you need a place to live in. You have decided to write to an agency for accommodation. v.1

You will go to a foreign country to stay there for one year, and you need a place to live in. You have decided to write to an agency for accommodation. v. 1 dKwK
Respected Sir/Madam, I'am writing to you regarding the accommodation in Canada for one year, as i'am coming to learn diploma course I. e the duration of course is one year. The main purpose of writing letters is that i'am coming to Canada for diploma course which helps me to gain more knowledge moreover it helps to promote next level in my present company. As one of my project Mananger suggested to do one year diploma courses that will benefit to my career as well as it will enhance my knowledge. So i request you to give accommodation in ur agency it helps me a lot. I will be waiting further to your replyThanking you Yours sincerely Sampath kumar
Respected Sir/Madam, I'
Did you mean "am I"?
am
writing to you regarding the accommodation in Canada for one year, as i'
Did you mean "am I"?
am
coming to learn diploma
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
course
I. e the duration of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
course
is one year. The main purpose of writing letters is that i'
Did you mean "am I"?
am
coming to Canada for diploma
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
course
which
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
helps
me to gain more knowledge
moreover
it
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
helps
to promote
next
level in my present
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
company
. As one of my project
Possible spelling mistake found.
Mananger
The verb 'suggested' is used with the gerund form: "suggested doing".
suggested to do
one year diploma
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
courses
that will benefit to my career
as well
as it will enhance my knowledge.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
So
Is this the personal pronoun "I"? It is spelled uppercase.
i
request you to give accommodation in
Possible spelling mistake found.
ur
agency it
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
helps
me a lot. I will be waiting
further
to your
Possible spelling mistake found.
replyThanking
you Yours
sincerely
Possible spelling mistake found.
Sampath
Please add a punctuation mark at the end of paragraph
kumar

IELTS letter You will go to a foreign country to stay there for one year, and you need a place to live in. You have decided to write to an agency for accommodation. v. 1

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  American English
1 paragraphs
117 words
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text can't be
less than 250 words in Task 2
and less than 150 words in Task 1
4.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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