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You will go to a foreign country to stay there for one year, and you need a place to live in. You have decided to write to an agency for accommodation.

You will go to a foreign country to stay there for one year, and you need a place to live in. You have decided to write to an agency for accommodation. 1OQL
Dear Sir or Madam, I have been accepted to an exchange program at University of Sciences, Paris. The university has suggested contacting your agency for accommodation. I would be requiring an accommodation for 1 year from March 2021 till February 2022. Since I would prefer to have the place to my myself, I would request for an individual housing. It can be a studio or a room in a student's hostel, equipped with bathroom and toilet facilities, a kitchen, wi-fi, and no more than 30 minutes from the university. My budget is 450€-500€/month. Enclosed is my letter of acceptance to the university. My contact details are listed below. Please let me know if I should provide any additional information. Yours sincerely, Amit Encl: Acceptance letter from University of Sciences, Paris Personal Details Name: Amit Mangotra Email: amit. mangotra@gmail. com Address: 1 Beverly Park Gurgaon 122002 India
Dear Sir or Madam,

I have been
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accepted
to an exchange program at
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University
of Sciences, Paris. The
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university
has suggested contacting your agency for accommodation.

I would be requiring
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an accommodation
for 1 year from March 2021 till February 2022. Since I would prefer to have the place to my myself, I would request for

an individual housing. It can be a studio or a room in a student's hostel, equipped with bathroom and toilet facilities, a kitchen,
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wi-fi
, and no more than

30 minutes from the
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university
. My budget is
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450€
-
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500€
/month.

Enclosed is my letter of acceptance to the
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university
. My contact
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details
are listed
below.
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Please
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let
me know if I should provide any additional information.

Yours
sincerely
,

Amit

Encl: Acceptance letter from
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University
of Sciences, Paris

Personal
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Details


Name: Amit
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Mangotra


Email:
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amit
.
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mangotra@gmail
.
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com


Address: 1
Beverly
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Park


Gurgaon 122002

India

IELTS letter You will go to a foreign country to stay there for one year, and you need a place to live in. You have decided to write to an agency for accommodation.

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  American English
10 paragraphs
145 words
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4.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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