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There is a public park near where you live. you have heard that the local council wants to sell this park . write a letter to a local newspaper. in your letter introduce yourself, describe the importance of the park, say what action you will take if the council continues with its plan.

There is a public park near where you live. you have heard that the local council wants to sell this park. write a letter to a local newspaper. in your letter introduce yourself, describe the importance of the park, say what action you will take if the council continues with its plan. 0OLQ
Dear Sir/Madam, I am Maria Carey and I am writing this letter to you to draw your attention towards vend of the public park in my area. I live in the Wesley Street since 20 years. There is a public park named ‘The Daily Dawn’ in my area. I have heard news that local council is getting it demolished to make a shopping centre instead of it. This park is much close to my heart as I have spent my childhood playing there. Moreover, people in my area are also attached to it more, they share emotional values with it, As the park provides an opportunity for health activities to all group of people. Aged persons visit park twice a day to have pure air from park’s atmosphere which has great value for their lungs. Even park is an ideal place for children also, where they play many outdoor games with the other children of area. Ladies also visit park to get relaxed and to keep themselves fit. Therefore, I request you to publish my article in your newspaper so that people could become aware about it and council may withdraw its decision. If they would not do this, we might choose to o for non-violent protest such as candle march. Looking forward for your support. Yours faithfully, Maria Carey
Dear Sir/Madam,

I am Maria
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Carey and
I am writing this letter to you to draw your attention towards vend of the public
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park
in my area.

I
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live
in the Wesley Street
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since
20 years. There is a public
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
park
named ‘The Daily Dawn’ in my area. I have heard news that local council is getting it demolished to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
a shopping
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centre
instead
of it. This
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park
is much close to my heart as I have spent my childhood playing there.
Moreover
,
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
in my area are
also
attached to it more, they share emotional values with it, As the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
park
provides an opportunity for health activities to all group of
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
. Aged persons visit
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park
twice a day to have pure air from
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park’s
atmosphere which has great value for their lungs. Even
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park
is an ideal place for children
also
, where they play
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many
outdoor games with the other children of area. Ladies
also
visit
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park
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
relaxed and to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
keep
themselves fit.

Therefore
, I request you to publish my article in your newspaper
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so
that
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
could become aware about it and council may withdraw its decision. If they would not do this, we might choose to o for non-violent protest such as candle march.

Looking forward for your support.

Yours
faithfully
,

Maria Carey

IELTS letter There is a public park near where you live. you have heard that the local council wants to sell this park. write a letter to a local newspaper. in your letter introduce yourself, describe the importance of the park, say what action you will take if the council continues with its plan.

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219 words
6.0
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