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You have received a job offer for an exciting, new position. Although you are expected to start on September 7th, you are only available to start a week later due to personal reasons. Write a letter to your new boss. In your letter: Express your enthusiasm for the job offer Explain the problem Suggest what you can do.

You have received a job offer for an exciting, new position. Although you are expected to start on September 7th, you are only available to start a week later due to personal reasons. Write a letter to your new boss. In your letter: Express your enthusiasm for the job offer Explain the problem Suggest what you can do. qJr5
Dear Ms. Mcllwain, I am writing this letter regarding incapacity to join from next month, In the light of the fact that I have been the new recruitment for the post of project compliance manger. With immense joy and happiness I would like to let you know that this position will be a milestone in my carrier. It will enhance my horizon in the field, More over the experience will further alleviate my confidence. All the challenges I am going to face at work will make more motivated to do better. It would be a honor to work for your esteemed company. Sir let me explain my situation, My mother is known case of Asthma, due to seasonal change her symptoms have been aggravated. Doctor advised her one week rest and should kept at home under supervision. I am the only domestic help she can have for now on. So most tentatively I can began working on 14th September, instead of 7th September. In the mean time I can work from home during my absence, All the calls related to me can be deviated to my resident connection, more over can have a brief meeting in the morning with my staff regarding the daily work task and summary at the end of the working time. I hope all these essential steps will prevent the new project from lagging. I await a positive response from you. Thanking you for your consideration. Yours fatihfully
Dear Ms.
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Mcllwain
, I am writing this letter regarding incapacity to
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join
from
next
month, In the light of the fact that I have been the new recruitment for the post of project compliance manger.

With immense joy and happiness I would like to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
let
you know that this position will be a milestone in my carrier. It will enhance my horizon in the field, More over the experience will
further
alleviate my confidence. All the challenges I am going to face at
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
work
will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
more motivated to do better. It would be
Use "an" instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
a
honor to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
work
for your esteemed
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company
.

Sir
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let
me
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explain
my situation, My mother
is known
case of Asthma, due to seasonal
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change
her symptoms have
been aggravated
. Doctor advised her
When a number forms part of an adjectival compound, use a hyphen: "one-week"
one week
rest and should
The verb 'should' requires the base form of the verb: "keep"
kept
at home under supervision. I am the
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only
domestic
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help
she can have for
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now
on.
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So
most
tentatively
I can
The verb 'can' requires the base form of the verb: "begin"
began
working on 14th September,
instead
of 7th September.

In the
Did you mean "meantime" (=the period of time between two things)?
mean time
I can
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
work
from home during my absence, All the calls related to me can
be deviated
to my resident connection, more over can have a brief meeting in the morning with my staff regarding the daily
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
work
task and summary at the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
end
of the working time. I hope all these essential steps will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
prevent
the new project from lagging. I await a
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
positive
response from you. Thanking you for your consideration.

Yours
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fatihfully

IELTS letter You have received a job offer for an exciting, new position. Although you are expected to start on September 7th, you are only available to start a week later due to personal reasons. Write a letter to your new boss. In your letter: Express your enthusiasm for the job offer Explain the problem Suggest what you can do.

Letter
  American English
5 paragraphs
241 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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