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ou recently received a letter from a friend asking for advice about whether to go to college or try to get a job. You think he/she could get a job. Write a letter to this friend. In your letter - [ ] Say why he/she would not enjoy going to college - [ ] Explain why getting a job is a good idea for him/her - [ ] Suggest types of job that would be suitable for him/her

ou recently received a letter from a friend asking for advice about whether to go to college or try to get a job. You think he/she could get a job. Write a letter to this friend. In your letter - [ ] Say why he/she would not enjoy going to college - [ ] Explain why getting a job is a good idea for him/her - [ ] Suggest types of job that would be suitable for him/her DpWA
Dear Sakshi, Hope this letter finds you in a good health. I am writing a reply to your letter that is asking for advise whether to go to college or to get a job. I think you should go for a job. In college, you will definitely get to learn a lot of things but the crowd is never good. There are so many students who came to college just for the sake of enjoyment. They always want to do parties, bunk their lectures and always expect the same from other students. Nowadays getting admission in the college is really expensive. And wasting your years in college without getting knowledge and skills is really a waste of time. Whereas, in job you can get the experience. You can learn to face different challenges and how to react in different environment. Job is a great platform where you can not only sharpen your skills but you can learn new as well. You will meet different experienced people and can learn a lot from them. This will makes you independent. I have noticed that you are good at managing multiple tasks at a time so you can go for a project manager job in hotels, agency etc. Getting a job in agency will increase your chance of growth in terms of position as well as salary. These are the reasons why I have preferred job. Hope you will also make a good choice for you. Good luck! Best regards, Surbhi
Dear
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Sakshi
,

Hope this letter finds you in a
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good
health. I am writing a reply to your letter
that is
asking for advise whether to go to college or to
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get
a
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job
. I
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think
you should go for a job.

In college, you will definitely
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get
to
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learn
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a lot of
things
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but
the crowd is never
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good
. There are
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so
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many
students who came to college
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just
for the sake of enjoyment. They always want to do parties, bunk their lectures and always
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expect
the same from other students. Nowadays getting admission in the college is
really
expensive. And wasting your years in college without getting knowledge and
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skills
is
really
a waste of time.

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Whereas
, in
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job
you can
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get
the experience. You can
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learn
to face
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different
challenges and how to react in
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different
environment.
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Job
is a great platform where you can not
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only
sharpen your
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skills
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but
you can
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learn
new
as well
. You will
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meet
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different
experienced
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people
and can
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learn
a lot from them. This will
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makes
you independent.

I have noticed that you are
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good
at managing multiple tasks at a time
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so
you can go for a project manager
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job
in hotels, agency etc. Getting a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
job
in agency will increase your chance of growth in terms of position
as well
as salary.

These are the reasons why I have preferred
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job
. Hope you will
also
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make
a
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good
choice for you.

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Good
luck!

Best regards,

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Surbhi
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IELTS letter ou recently received a letter from a friend asking for advice about whether to go to college or try to get a job. You think he/she could get a job. Write a letter to this friend. In your letter - [ ] Say why he/she would not enjoy going to college - [ ] Explain why getting a job is a good idea for him/her - [ ] Suggest types of job that would be suitable for him/her

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5.5
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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
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  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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