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You were hurt in a small accident in a store last week. Write a letter to the store manager.

You were hurt in a small accident in a store last week. Write a letter to the store manager. 6aQVr
Dear Sir, I am writing to bring to your attention an incident that occurred in your supermarket last weekend. I would also like to make some suggestions so that such a thing does not happen again. My name is John and I have been a loyal customer at your Coles on Grange Road ever since I moved into the area eight years ago. Although your store is slightly further from my home than the IGA, I have always made the trip because of your quality fresh produce and excellent custoemer service. On this occasion, however, I suffered an unfortunate accident due, I believe, to the negligence of the shop floor staff. As I was walking to the checkout with my groceries, I slipped on some spilled water and fell over, spraining my wrist in the process. Though I understand the store gets very busy, I feel that this fall could have been avoided if the staff had been quicker to act. I would therefore like to suggest that you review your policies around spillages, and, in particular ensure that staff members stand guard next to any spilled liquids until they have been cleaned up. I hope you will take this into account in order to avoid further mishaps. Yours faithfully, John Doe
Dear Sir,

I am writing to bring to your attention an incident that occurred in your supermarket last weekend. I would
also
like to
make
some
suggestions
so
that such a thing does not happen again.

My name is John and I have been a loyal customer at your
Coles on
Grange Road ever since I
moved
into the area eight years ago. Although your store is
slightly
further
from my home than the IGA, I have always made the trip
because
of your quality fresh produce and excellent
custoemer
service.

On this occasion,
however
, I suffered an unfortunate accident due, I believe, to the negligence of the shop floor staff. As I was walking to the checkout with my groceries, I slipped on
some
spilled water and fell over, spraining my wrist in the process.

Though I understand the store
gets
very
busy, I feel that this fall could have
been avoided
if the staff had been quicker to act. I would
therefore
like to suggest that you review your policies around spillages, and,
in particular
ensure that staff members stand guard
next
to any spilled liquids until they have
been cleaned
up.

I hope you will take this into account in order to avoid
further
mishaps.

Yours
faithfully
,

John Doe
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IELTS letter You were hurt in a small accident in a store last week. Write a letter to the store manager.

Letter
  American English
8 paragraphs
211 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Lexical Resource: 6.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 5.5
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