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You were hurt in a minor accident inside a supermarket, and you wish to complain to the supermarket. Write a letter to the manager of the supermarket. In your letter say who you are give details about the accident suggest how the supermarket could prevent similar accidents

Respected sir, My name is John. I am form your supermarket's nearest apartment. I had been the regular customer of your supermarket. Now I'm writing this letter for complain regards. I was come with my grandmother to your store three days ago. Firstly we took some grocery items in ground floor. After that my gramdma told I want to take clay pots. But the pots is only available in first floor. So we went via the staircase and collected the clay pots at in first floor. Descending time my grandma is so struggled on the steps on the stair. Further more clay pots are fall down and brocked. There is no injured, that's a good time for my grandmother. Please prevent these kinds of accidents in your supermarket. I have some suggestions for you that is, If you make one escalator, Older people are less likely to have an accident. Moreover making one lift is the another one opinion for prevent the accidents. I'm looking forward to changes in your supermarket soon. Thanking you. Yours faithfully, John.
Respected sir, My name is John. I am form your supermarket's nearest apartment. I had been the regular customer of your supermarket.
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come
with my grandmother to your store three days ago.
Firstly
we took
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some
grocery items in
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ground floor
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After
that my
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gramdma
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I want to take clay
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pots
.
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But
the
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pots
is
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only
available in
first
floor.
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So
we went via the staircase and collected the clay
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pots
at in
first
floor. Descending time my grandma is
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so
struggled on the steps on the stair.
Further
more clay
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pots
are fall down and
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brocked
. There is no injured, that's a
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good
time for my grandmother.
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Please
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prevent
these kinds of accidents in your supermarket. I have
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some
suggestions for you
that is
, If you
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make
one escalator, Older
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people
are less likely to have an accident.
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Moreover
making one lift is the another one opinion for
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prevent
the accidents. I'm looking forward to
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changes
in your supermarket
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soon
. Thanking you. Yours
faithfully
, John.

IELTS letter You were hurt in a minor accident inside a supermarket, and you wish to complain to the supermarket. Write a letter to the manager of the supermarket. In your letter say who you are give details about the accident suggest how the supermarket could prevent similar accidents

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5.0
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