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You and friend start weekly dance club and found a club that is suitable for holdings your meetings. ‘ u and ur friend project Ask is it possible to rent a hall and under what terms State what date and time you would like to use the hall

Dear Sir, I am writing this letter with regards to inform you that we are planning to start a dance class consequently, we find a hall in heart of the city for holding our meeting. I along with my friend are planning to start a dance class as he is holding a degree in ‘free style’ dance form from one of the reputed institutions and me completed my masters in business admistration. Hence, mutually decided to open an partnership and shared the role of being an entrepreneur by using our skills. The first necessary step is selection of a hall and luckily we find in the city centre. So, we like to know the rent of that hall for a month and simultaneousy we like to know all the terms and conditions levived with the renting. Indeed, we are in the verge of finalization within a week so you immediate response help as to start as early as possible. We would like to start from next month because holidays started from end of this month. So, early starting help us to attract maximum students and indeed, we are planning to have 5 batches in entire day from morning to evening for a duration of an hour. Hope to hear from you soon. Yours sincerely, Tara Sharma

Dear Sir,

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with regards to
 inform you that we are planning to You use this word too often, consider replacing it withoutsetdawnkickoffopening
start
 a dance This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :coursetraining
class
consequently
, we find a hall in heart of the city for holding our meeting.

I along with my friend are planning to You use this word too often, consider replacing it withoutsetdawnkickoffopening
start
 a dance This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :coursetraining
class
 as he is holding a degree in ‘free style’ dance form from one of the reputed institutions and me completed my masters in business Possible spelling mistake found.administrationadmiration
admistration
. Hence
, mutually
 decided to open Use “a” instead of ‘an’ if the following word doesn’t start with a vowel sound, e.g. ‘a sentence’, ‘a university’.a
an
 partnership and shared the role of being an entrepreneur by using our This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :proficiencies
skills
.

The first
 necessary step is selection of a hall and luckily we find in the city Possible spelling mistake. ‘centre’ is British English.center
centre
. This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:consequently
So
, we like to know the rent of that hall for a month and Possible spelling mistake found.simultaneouslysimultaneous
simultaneousy
 we like to know all the terms and conditions Possible spelling mistake found.revivedlevied
levived
 with the renting. Indeed
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so
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you immediate response
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help
 as to You use this word too often, consider replacing it withoutsetdawnkickoffopening
start
 as early as possible.

We would like to You use this word too often, consider replacing it withoutsetdawnkickoffopening
start
 from next
 month This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:due to the factin light of the fact thatowing to the fact that
because
 holidays This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :initiated
started
 from This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :expiration
end
 of this month. This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:consequently
So
, early starting This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :assistassistance
help
 us to attract maximum students and indeed
, we are planning to have 5 batches in entire day from morning to evening for a duration of an hour.

Hope to hear from you This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:in the near future
soon
.

Yours sincerely
,

Tara Sharma