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You are studying a short course in another country. Your accommodation was arranged by the course provider. There is a major problem with the accommodation. Write a letter to the course provider. In your letter,

Dear Sir, I am writing to complain about accommodation at National college campus near downtown area, Ontario. I have been your student and studying a integrated management course since March-20. I required your attention towards student accommodation provided by school management which is so unhygienic due to cleanliness issue. However, many of the students came with health issue recently due to sheer irregularity of cleaning staff at the place of accommodation. In addition, there is no WI-FI facility for students getting their assignments completed after program hours. Students force to sitting in college campus itself to attend any online seminar or webinars due to unavailability of internet facility. Though National college is one of most prestigious college in Ontario province, accommodation facilities were not up to the mark. I was so excited when I got admission in Nation College thinking ambient atmosphere and good infrastructure contains medium but clean and hygiene rooms and several facilities like WI-FI, Projector and other learning technicalities. Keeping student's health and basic necessity in mind, it is my humble request you to please resolve the aforesaid issues at the earliest. I look forward to hearing from you. Yours Sincerely, Nikunj Parsana
Dear Sir,

I am writing to complain about
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
accommodation
at National college campus near downtown area, Ontario. I have been your
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
student
and studying
Use “an” instead of ‘a’ if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. ‘an article’, ‘an hour’.
a
integrated management course since March-20.

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I
required your attention towards
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
student
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
accommodation
provided by school management which is
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
unhygienic due to cleanliness issue.
However
,
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many
of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
students
came with health issue recently due to sheer irregularity of cleaning staff at the place of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
accommodation
.
In addition
, there is no WI-FI facility for
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
students
getting their assignments completed after program hours.
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
Students
force to
The verb after “to” should be in the base form: “sit”.
sitting
in college campus itself to attend any online seminar or webinars due to unavailability of internet facility.

Though National college is one of most prestigious college in Ontario province,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
accommodation
facilities were not up to the mark. I was
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
excited when I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
got
admission in Nation College thinking ambient atmosphere and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
infrastructure contains medium
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
clean and hygiene rooms and several facilities like WI-FI, Projector and other learning technicalities.

Keeping student's health and basic necessity in mind, it is my humble request you to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
please
resolve the aforesaid issues at the earliest. I look forward to hearing from you.

Yours
Sincerely
,

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Nikunj
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IELTS letter You are studying a short course in another country. Your accommodation was arranged by the course provider. There is a major problem with the accommodation. Write a letter to the course provider. In your letter,

Letter
  American English
7 paragraphs
195 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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