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You want to sell some of your furniture. You think a friend of yours might like to buy it from you. v.5

You want to sell some of your furniture. You think a friend of yours might like to buy it from you. v. 5
Dear Rajib, Hope you are doing great. I'm writing to let you know that I have decided to sell some of my furniture. I will move to a new city soon and my new apartment is not big enough to accommodate all of my furniture. I thought you might be interested to buy some of the furniture I have planned to sell. You know that I've recently been transferred to Rajshahi. It's great news for me because I have wished to live there for a long. However, there's a problem- the new flat is smaller than my current one and I will need to sell some of my furniture. More specifically, I want to sell my dining and sofa set. Last month, you came to my house on the occasion of my younger daughter's birthday. I remember you inquiring about the dining table and the sofa set and I thought you might want to have those. Nevertheless, it's a large dining table including six chairs made of mahogany wood. Besides, the sofa I own is a modern fabric Scandinavian sofa set that was placed in my living room. I would rather sell the furniture to someone know that an unknown person and willing to offer a reasonable price. You can come anytime you want and inspect the furniture. If you feel that the yare perfect for you, you can buy those. Don't worry about the price. No more today, speak to you soon. Warm wishes, Rahim Ali
Dear
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Rajib
,

Hope you are doing great. I'm writing to
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let
you know that I have decided to
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sell
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some
of my
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furniture
. I will
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move
to a
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new
city
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soon
and my
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new
apartment is not
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big
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enough
to accommodate all of my
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furniture
.
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I
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thought
you might
be interested
to
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buy
If the text is a generality, 'of the' is not necessary. Did you mean "some"?
some of the
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furniture
I have planned to sell.

You know that I've recently
been transferred
to
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Rajshahi
. It's great
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news
for me
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because
I have wished to
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live
there for a long.
However
, there's a problem- the
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new
flat is smaller than my
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current
one and I will need to
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sell
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some
of my
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furniture
. More
specifically
, I want to
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sell
my dining and
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sofa
set.

Last month, you came to my
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
house
on the occasion of my younger daughter's birthday. I remember you inquiring about the dining table and the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
sofa
set and I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
thought
you might want to have those.
Nevertheless
, it's a large dining table including six chairs made of mahogany wood.
Besides
, the
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sofa
I
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own
is a modern fabric Scandinavian
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sofa
set that
was placed
in my living room. I would
rather
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sell
the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
furniture
to someone
The pronoun 'someone' is usually used with a third-person or a past tense verb: "knows", "knew".
know
that an unknown person and willing to offer a reasonable price.

You can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
come
anytime you want and inspect the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
furniture
. If you feel that the
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yare
perfect for you, you can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
buy
those. Don't worry about the price.

No more
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
today
, speak to you
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
soon
.

Warm wishes,

Rahim Ali
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
18Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
6Mistakes

IELTS letter You want to sell some of your furniture. You think a friend of yours might like to buy it from you. v. 5

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  American English
8 paragraphs
246 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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