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you want to sell an old computer. you think a friends of yours would be interested in buying it. explain why you are selling the computer. describe its features. suggest a time when your friend can come and see it.

you want to sell an old computer. you think a friends of yours would be interested in buying it. explain why you are selling the computer. describe its features. suggest a time when your friend can come and see it. 7WRk5
Dear Sarah, I'm writing in connection with my computer that I have to change to a new version and more powerful. As you know 3 years ago I bought my PC but I want to buy another one because rendering in 3D MAX software is the most important features in my job. The process of rendering needs a faster graphic cards that this computer doesn't have. I think it doesn't meet my needs and expectations. A few days ago my colleagues introduced me the latest version of computer with a highly graphical card that helped increase the speed of render. When I decided to sell it, remember that you asked me to inform you if I want to sell. I would like to let you know that the color of my computer is black, the monitor is 27", the speed and accuracy is well and its graphic card is 128G. It seems this PC could useful for your researches. If you like, this weekend can come to my home, see the computer and talking about it. I look forward to seeing you in my home. See you soon,
Dear Sarah, I'm writing in connection with my computer that I
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have to
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change
to a new version and more powerful.

As you know 3 years ago I
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bought
my PC
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but
I want to
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buy
another one
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because
rendering in 3D MAX software is the most
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important
features in my job. The process of rendering needs a faster graphic cards that this computer doesn't have. I
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think
it doesn't
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
meet
my needs and expectations. A few days ago my colleagues introduced me the latest version of computer with a
highly
graphical card that
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
helped
increase the speed of render. When I decided to sell it, remember that you asked me to inform you if I want to sell.

I would like to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
let
you know that the color of my computer is black, the monitor is 27", the speed and accuracy is well and its graphic card is 128G. It seems this PC could useful for your researches.

If you like, this weekend can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
come
to my home,
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
see
the computer and talking about it.

I look forward to seeing you in my home.

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See
you
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soon
,
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IELTS letter you want to sell an old computer. you think a friends of yours would be interested in buying it. explain why you are selling the computer. describe its features. suggest a time when your friend can come and see it.

Letter
  American English
6 paragraphs
188 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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