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You want to organize a party for your birthday party,do you ask for the restaurant manager comfortable hall for your party.

You want to organize a party for your birthday party, do you ask for the restaurant manager comfortable hall for your party. x8oGQ
Dear Mr Timm. I am writing to tell you about my anniversary of 30 birthday party to pass very comfortable and fascinating places from your restaurant. Firstly, I saw a lot of cafe's for celebrating, but they were some small and it was not enough light. Moreover, all my colleagues advised me to choose this restaurant. They say that it is cozy and give among of entertainment for everybody. Lighting system and musical archestet are available. As the result, I demand to accept their invite and I would be very happy, if you accept my invite. We are very thankful with you all my friends. Thirdly, we have a big company and do each month organize a party one by one. Furthermore, my friends looked at its fascinated they will demand of course to celebrate here next ceremonies. I am looking forward you accept my invite. Your sincerely. Miss Alina.
Dear Mr
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Timm
. I am writing to
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comfortable and fascinating places from your restaurant.
Firstly
, I
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saw
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cafe
's for celebrating,
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they were
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small
and it was not
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enough
light.
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, all my colleagues advised me to choose this restaurant. They say that it is cozy and give among of entertainment for everybody. Lighting system and musical
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are available. As the result, I demand to accept their invite and I would be
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very
happy, if you accept my invite. We are
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very
thankful with you all my friends.
Thirdly
, we have a
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big
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company
and do each month organize a party one by one.
Furthermore
, my friends looked at its fascinated they will demand
of course
to celebrate here
next
ceremonies. I am looking forward you accept my invite. Your
sincerely
. Miss Alina.
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IELTS letter You want to organize a party for your birthday party, do you ask for the restaurant manager comfortable hall for your party.

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  American English
1 paragraphs
150 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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