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You visited local beach and found out that there is a rubbish problem. In your letter: Describe the problem How it affects people on the beach Suggest what you want to do about them

You visited local beach and found out that there is a rubbish problem. In your letter: Describe the problem How it affects people on the beach Suggest what you want to do about them XGq0N
Dear Sir/Madam, I am writing concerning Palma beach, where I have recently been to. The issue is that the beach is full of litter that people have left after spending a holiday on it. In fact, it is almost impossible to find a free sport without bumping on a glass of broken bottles, beer cans, wrappings, and watermelon peels, etc. It is understood that it is not only an ecology problem but also unsanitary conditions. As well as children may harm themselves stepping on the broken glass. I strongly suggest you tackle this problem as soon as possible. First, it is recommended to send a cleaning team to the beach and remove all the trash. In addition, the administration might give an announcement for those who want to volunteer and help with picking up trash. The second measure will be introducing a fine for dumping waste on the beach and providing a sufficient amount of garbage bins. I hope you will address my complaint at the earliest opportunity. Sincerely yours, Mariya
Dear Sir/Madam,

I am writing concerning Palma
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
beach
, where I have recently been to. The issue is that the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
beach
is full of litter that
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
have
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
left
after spending a holiday on it. In fact, it is almost impossible to find a free sport without bumping on a glass of broken bottles, beer cans, wrappings, and watermelon peels, etc. It
is understood
that it is not
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only
an ecology problem
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but
also
unsanitary conditions.
As well
as children may harm themselves stepping on the broken glass.

I
strongly
suggest you tackle this problem as
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soon
as possible.
First
, it
is recommended
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
send
a cleaning team to the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
beach
and remove all the trash.
In addition
, the administration might give an announcement for those who want to volunteer and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
with picking up trash. The second measure will be introducing a fine for dumping waste on the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
beach
and providing a sufficient amount of garbage bins.

I hope you will address my complaint at the earliest opportunity.

Sincerely
yours,

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Mariya
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IELTS letter You visited local beach and found out that there is a rubbish problem. In your letter: Describe the problem How it affects people on the beach Suggest what you want to do about them

Letter
  American English
6 paragraphs
170 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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