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This is to inform you that I'm feeling uncomfortable with the arrangements provided which further leads to the unhealthy environment for work or study. I was provided with a twin - sharing place in the hostel and my roommate is of uncooperative nature. The place has common bed and a small study table which is not that spacious to be shared and work/study comfortably. As I'm a final year student, so need to endeavour on projects and study for competitive exams. But I can't concentrate properly while studying as we have to share the same table. Also, room is provided with common bed, so I can't sleep well and study early morning for my exams. Furthermore, he listens to loud music all the time that worsens the room environment even more. I have, multiple times, requested him to slow down the music while I study, but he never listens to me. I request you to shift me to single sharing room so that I can concentrate more on my studies and prepare well for my exams to shape my future. Else, if that is not possible, then please provide with separate study area and bed and take necessary action against him so that there is healthy environment to prepare well for the exams. I hope you will take this into consideration and address my problems with this arrangement. Looking forward to hearing from you.

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 leads to the unhealthy environment for work or study.

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 and prepare well for my exams to shape my future. Else, if that is
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 area and bed and take necessary action against him This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:consequently
so
 that there is healthy environment to prepare well for the exams. I hope you will take this into consideration and address my problems with this arrangement.

Looking forward to hearing from you. 