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You travelled by a long-distance bus recently an your suitcase was damaged. write a letter to the bus company. In your letter. -inform the bus company of when an to where you travelled -describe your suitcase and what happened to it -explain why the company should pay for a new suitcase You should write at least 150 words.

You travelled by a long-distance bus recently an your suitcase was damaged. write a letter to the bus company. In your letter. -inform the bus company of when an to where you travelled -describe your suitcase and what happened to it -explain why the company should pay for a new suitcase oq3b
Dear Sir or Madam I am a regural passenger of your suttle services. I am writing this letter to inform you about my recent experience of careless baggage handeling from your company. I demand immediate corrective action to compensiate my damages. On the day of 10th May, I used one of your buses from Pearson International Airport to Barrie Bus Terminal. Once I reached at my destination, I was surprised to observe that my black leather suitcase with silver boarder was ripped and was deformed because of heavy load placed over it. The suitcase being mentioned is the very one that I bought from a branded store during my business trip abroad. I paid $200 for the suitcase. The cause of damage seem obvious. The load placed over my suitcase were extremely heavy and your staff pushed it carelessly in the tight compartment to fit bulky loads from all the passengers. Hence, I would demand full compensation for my brand new suitcase otherwise consider me as a lost customer. Yours Faithfully, PB
Dear Sir or Madam

I am a
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regural
passenger of your
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suttle
services. I am writing this letter to inform you about my recent experience of careless baggage
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handeling
from your
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company
. I demand immediate corrective action to
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compensiate
my damages.

On the day of 10th May, I
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used
one of your buses from Pearson International Airport to Barrie Bus Terminal. Once I reached at my destination, I
was surprised
to observe that my black leather
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
suitcase
with silver boarder
was ripped
and
was deformed
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because
of heavy load placed over it. The
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
suitcase
being mentioned
is the
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very
one that I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
bought
from a branded store during my
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business


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trip
abroad. I paid $200 for the suitcase.

The cause of damage
Did you mean "seems"?
seem
obvious. The load placed over my
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
suitcase
were
extremely
heavy and your staff pushed it
carelessly
in the tight compartment to fit bulky loads from all the passengers.

Hence
, I would demand full compensation for my
'brand new' seems to be a compound adjective in front of a noun. Use a hyphen: "brand-new".
brand new
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
suitcase
otherwise
consider me as a lost customer.

Yours
Faithfully
,

PB

IELTS letter You travelled by a long-distance bus recently an your suitcase was damaged. write a letter to the bus company. In your letter. -inform the bus company of when an to where you travelled -describe your suitcase and what happened to it -explain why the company should pay for a new suitcase

Letter
  American English
7 paragraphs
171 words
6.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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