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You live in a room in college which you share with another student. However, there are many problems with this arrangement and you find it very difficult to work. Write a letter to the accommodation officer at the college. In the letter:Describe the situation Explain your problems and why it is difficult to work Say what kind of accommodation you would prefer

You live in a room in college which you share with another student. However, there are many problems with this arrangement and you find it very difficult to work. Write a letter to the accommodation officer at the college. In the letter: Describe the situation Explain your problems and why it is difficult to work Say what kind of accommodation you would prefer Ke8R
Dear Sir, My name is Shola James, I am writing to express my dissatisfaction with an ongoing issue I am experiencing at my current hostel. During my freshman year, I was assigned to stay in room 15H in New Brunei Hostel and I have been a resident there ever since. However, I am a final year student now and that comes with more workload and an added pressure to graduate. Recently, there has been a rapid increase in the number of social events organised in the hostel that generates excessive disturbance. This unrelenting noise pollution has negatively affected my academic performance of late as I am constantly distracted from my studies by the sound coming from neighbouring rooms. Also, my sleeping regimen is now irregular due to constant disruptions, hence adversely impacting my health. Therefore, I request you kindly relocate me to a vacant lodging in Old Brunei Hostel where there is zero-tolerance for public disturbance. The hostel's rules are strictly enforced and students do not violate them. This will significantly improve not just my health but also afford me a conducive environment to study satisfactorily. I await your revert. Yours faithfully, Shola James.
Dear Sir,

My name is
Shola
James, I am writing to express my dissatisfaction with an ongoing issue I am experiencing at my
current
hostel.

During my freshman year, I
was assigned
to stay in room 15H in New Brunei Hostel and I have been a resident there ever since.
However
, I am a final year student
now
and that
comes
with more workload and an
added
pressure to graduate.

Recently, there has been a rapid increase in the number of social
events
organised
in the hostel that generates excessive disturbance. This unrelenting noise pollution has
negatively
affected
my academic performance of late as I am
constantly
distracted from my studies by the sound coming from
neighbouring
rooms.
Also
, my sleeping regimen is
now
irregular due to constant disruptions,
hence
adversely
impacting my health.

Therefore
, I request you kindly relocate me to a vacant lodging in
Old
Brunei Hostel where there is zero-tolerance for public disturbance. The hostel's
rules
are
strictly
enforced and students do not violate them. This will
significantly
improve
not
just
my health
but
also
afford me a conducive environment to study
satisfactorily
.

I await your revert.

Yours
faithfully
,

Shola
James.
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IELTS letter You live in a room in college which you share with another student. However, there are many problems with this arrangement and you find it very difficult to work. Write a letter to the accommodation officer at the college. In the letter: Describe the situation Explain your problems and why it is difficult to work Say what kind of accommodation you would prefer

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  American English
8 paragraphs
194 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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