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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing this letter to apply for the post of sales manager in your company as advertised in Daily tribune on 25th of july. My name is Farrukh. I have recently completed my post graduate degree in business administration from the university of behria. I have also done six months internship in the safari hotels. Fortunately, during my study period i also got a chance to go overseas for three month diploma in hotel management on scholarship. I would provide excellent services to customers. I am an honest person with effective communication skills. I am available to come for an interview at your convenience. Please let me know if you have any specific requirement regarding job hours. Hoping to get a prompt response from you! Yours faithfully, Farrukh Maqsood

Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing this letter to apply for the post of sales manager in your This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :enterprisecorporation
company
 as advertised in Daily tribune on 25th of Possible spelling mistake found.JulyjurydulyJudyJul
july
.

My name is Farrukh. I have recently completed my post graduate degree in business administration from the university of Possible spelling mistake found.Beria
behria
. I have also
 done six months internship in the safari hotels. Fortunately
, during my study period Is this the personal pronoun "I"? It is spelled uppercase.I
i
also
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :acquired
got
 a chance to go overseas for three month Possible agreement error. The noun 'diploma' seems to be countable, so consider using: "diplomas", "diplomata".diplomasdiplomata
diploma
 in hotel management on scholarship. I would provide excellent services to customers. I am an honest person with effective communication This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :proficiencies
skills
.

Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
 am available to This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :approacharrive
come
 for an interview at your convenience. This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :satisfy
Please
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :authorize
let
 me know if you have any specific requirement regarding job hours.

Hoping to This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :acquire
get
 a prompt response from you!

Yours faithfully
,

Farrukh Possible spelling mistake found.Manhood
Maqsood

IELTS letter You saw an advertisement in the news for a job and you are interested to apply.

Letter

American English

7 paragraphs

133 words

This writing has been penalized,
text can't be
less than 250 words in Task 2
and less than 150 words in Task 1

4.0

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5

Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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One main idea per paragraph
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Include an introduction and conclusion
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Support main points with an explanation and then an example
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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Vary your linking phrases using synonyms

Lexical Resource: 5.5

Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
Check your writing for errors

Task Achievement: 5.0

Answer all parts of the question
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Present relevant ideas
Fully explain these ideas
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Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

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