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Write a letter of application to mrs hopkins the oganizer of the trip,telling her: -why would you like to go on the trip -what skills do you have -what previous experience

Write a letter of application to mrs hopkins the oganizer of the trip, telling her: -why would you like to go on the trip -what skills do you have -what previous experience pReAL
Dear mrs hopkins, I am writing this letter to apply for the being a player in your travel competition which i saw advertised on the newspaper. I want to go on the trip because i can explore to another country and meet new friends. I have been play a lot of exploring game before so that i am confident of my skills such as: go for a hunt or climbing the moutine. Last yeari joined a competition of hunting animal anh i am the winner. Therfore, i am patient and skillful enough to be a brilliant player. I would highly appreciate if you accept my letter. I am looking foward to hearing you in the near future. Yours faithfully, Linda
Dear
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mrs
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hopkins
,

I am writing this letter to apply for
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the
being a player in your travel competition which
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i
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saw
advertised on the newspaper.

I want to go on the trip
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because
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i
can explore to another country and
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meet
new friends.
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I
have been play
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a lot of
exploring game
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before
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so
that
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i
am confident of my
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skills
such as: go for a hunt or climbing the
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moutine
.

Last
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yeari
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joined
a competition of hunting animal
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anh
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i
am the winner.
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Therfore
,
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i
am patient and skillful
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enough
to be a brilliant player.

I would
highly
appreciate if you accept my letter. I am looking
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foward
to hearing you in the near future.

Yours
faithfully
,

Linda

IELTS letter Write a letter of application to mrs hopkins the oganizer of the trip, telling her: -why would you like to go on the trip -what skills do you have -what previous experience

Letter
  American English
7 paragraphs
119 words
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less than 250 words in Task 2
and less than 150 words in Task 1
4.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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