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You saw a travel agency’s advertisement for a vacation abroad. Write a letter to inquire about booking this trip. In your letter: • describe the holiday you hope to take and why the advertisement appealed to you • describe what information you need from the travel agency before making your booking • request this information

You saw a travel agency’s advertisement for a vacation abroad. Write a letter to inquire about booking this trip. In your letter: • describe the holiday you hope to take and why the advertisement appealed to you • describe what information you need from the travel agency before making your booking • request this information m33VK
Dear Sir, I am writing to you regarding the vacation advertisement your travel agency had given out in the newspaper three days back. For the last few weeks, I am planning a trip to Greece and was searching for some good vacation packages. Coincidentally this advertisement popped up and the trip which I am looking for is exactly like what you have mentioned with 4 nights and 3 days stay. It also covers some famous tourist attractions which are on my visiting list. The price also seems quite reasonable. The advertisement does cover most of the details about the trip but, I need a little bit extra information before going ahead with the booking. I would like to get details regarding the food arrangements like types of dishes on the menu and about the facilities available in the hotel room as I will be traveling with kids, so I need to be specific about these things. I would request you to assist me with the extra information and it would be a great help to me. I would be looking forward to hearing from you. Yours sincerely Manisha
Dear Sir,

I am writing to you regarding the vacation advertisement your travel agency had
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given
out in the newspaper three days back.

For the last few weeks, I am planning a trip to Greece and was searching for
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some
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
vacation packages.
Coincidentally
this advertisement popped up and the trip which I am looking for is exactly like what you have mentioned with 4 nights and 3 days stay. It
also
covers
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some
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
famous
tourist attractions which are on my visiting list. The price
also
seems quite reasonable.

The advertisement does cover most of the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
details
about the trip
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
, I need a
Reduce redundancy by using "little" or "bit".
little bit
extra information
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before
going ahead with the booking. I would like to
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get
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
details
regarding the food arrangements like types of dishes on the menu and about the facilities available in the hotel room as I will be traveling with kids,
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so
I need to be specific about these things.

I would request you to assist me with the extra information and it would be a great
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help
to me.
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
would be looking forward to hearing from you.

Yours
sincerely


Manisha
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IELTS letter You saw a travel agency’s advertisement for a vacation abroad. Write a letter to inquire about booking this trip. In your letter: • describe the holiday you hope to take and why the advertisement appealed to you • describe what information you need from the travel agency before making your booking • request this information

Letter
  American English
6 paragraphs
187 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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