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You saw a brochure for a one-week walking tour in the mountains. You're very interested in taking part, but you're not very fit and are worried you wouldn't be able to keep up. Write to the tour operator. In your letter: • Explain why you're interested in the tour. • Ask for information about dates and prices. • Express your concerns about your fitness level. You do not need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear Sir or Madam, You should write at least 150 words.

You saw a brochure for a one-week walking tour in the mountains. You're very interested in taking part, but you're not very fit and are worried you wouldn't be able to keep up. Write to the tour operator. In your letter: • Explain why you're interested in the tour. • Ask for information about dates and prices. • Express your concerns about your fitness level. You do not need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear Sir or Madam, O73p
Dear Sir / Madam, I am writing with regard to a one-week walking tour in the Rocky Mountains that your company is organizing. I received its brochure in my mail, and I am extremely keen on taking part in it. I have always wanted to take a tour of the Rocky Mountains as I have heard that the trail is quite scenic and adventurous. I happen to be a nature lover and this trail has been on my wish list for a long time. The pictures provided in the brochure look truly breath-taking and I imagine it would be an experience of a lifetime. I would like to request for some specific information regarding the tour. For instance, could you please let me know the exact date and time of the excursion? It would be great if you could also indicate the approximate duration of the tour and what equipment we are expected to carry with ourselves. And very importantly, what would be the total cost for the tour? Are there any early bird or group discounts available? Also, if you could let me know about the food arrangements. Do we have to bring our own food, or would that be included in the total cost? Furthermore, I would like to inquire about the minimum fitness levels essential for this tour. Recently, I have undergone a knee surgery, and even though I am extremely interested in taking part in the tour, I am afraid I would not be able to keep up with the rest of the group. Although my doctor has given me a go ahead for it, I am still quite skeptical. Could you please indicate if there would a fitness test that needs to be taken in order to be eligible for this? This would really help me make an informed decision about the tour. I look forward to your response. Yours Faithfully, Sheeba Hasan
Dear Sir / Madam,

I am writing with regard to a one-week walking
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
tour
in the Rocky Mountains that your
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
company
is organizing. I received its brochure in my mail, and I am
extremely
keen on taking part in it.

Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
have always wanted to take a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
tour
of the Rocky Mountains as I have heard that the trail is quite scenic and adventurous.
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
happen to be a nature lover and this trail has been on my wish list for a long time. The pictures provided in the brochure look
truly
breath-taking and I imagine it would be an experience of a lifetime.

I would like to request for
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
specific information regarding the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
tour
.
For instance
, could you
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
please
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
let
me know the exact date and time of the excursion? It would be great if you could
also
indicate the approximate duration of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
tour
and what equipment we are
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
expected
to carry with ourselves. And
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
importantly
, what would be the total cost for the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
tour
? Are there any early bird or group discounts available?

Also
, if you could
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
let
me know about the food arrangements. Do we
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
have to
bring our
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
own
food, or would that
be included
in the total cost?

Furthermore
, I would like to inquire about the minimum fitness levels essential for this
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
tour
. Recently, I have undergone a knee surgery, and
even though
I am
extremely
interested in taking part in the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
tour
, I am afraid I would not be able to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
keep
up with the rest of the group. Although my doctor has
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
given
me a go ahead for it, I am
still
quite skeptical. Could you
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
please
indicate if there would a fitness
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
test
that needs to
be taken
in order to be eligible for this? This would
really
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
me
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
an informed decision about the tour.

I look forward to your response.

Yours
Faithfully
,

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Sheeba
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Hasan
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IELTS letter You saw a brochure for a one-week walking tour in the mountains. You're very interested in taking part, but you're not very fit and are worried you wouldn't be able to keep up. Write to the tour operator. In your letter: • Explain why you're interested in the tour. • Ask for information about dates and prices. • Express your concerns about your fitness level. You do not need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear Sir or Madam,

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6.0
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