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You recently went to a public event that ypu think your friend would enjoy. Write a letter to a friend

You recently went to a public event that ypu think your friend would enjoy. Write a letter to a friend D2naE
Dear John, Hi! How are you? I hope this letter finds you in pink of your health. so I am inditing this epistle to let you know that there will be a festival in my society on the 2nd of October. I think you might be interested to participate in it. Firstly, let me describe to you what the event is like. Although, you are very familiar with our society culture either it is related to any festival or event, albeit this time our committee organized a cooking event which gives chance to every participant to show their aptitude at a state level. Probing further, you always make delicious items to eat as well as won several awards in cooking. Moreover, as I know you from childhood, you want a podium to represent your talent, hence this is a great opportunity for you to make your dream true. Evidently, I booked an online bus ticket for you. I will meet you at the north bus station. The day before an event we purchase groceries for our items. Also, bring some money and winter clothes with you because we will spend some precious time together. See you soon. Give my regards to my beloved uncle and aunt. Best wishes, Tom Smith
Dear John,

Hi! How are you? I hope this letter finds you in pink of your health.
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I am inditing this epistle to
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let
you know that there will be a festival in my society on the 2nd of October. I
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think
you might
be interested
to participate in it.

Firstly
,
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let
me
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describe
to you what the
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event
is like. Although, you are
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very
familiar with our society culture either it
is related
to any festival or
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event
, albeit this time our committee organized a cooking
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
event
which gives chance to every participant to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
show
their aptitude at a state level.

Probing
further
, you always
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
delicious items to eat
as well
as won several awards in cooking.
Moreover
, as I know you from childhood, you want a podium to represent your talent,
hence
this is a great opportunity for you to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
your dream true.

Evidently
, I booked an online bus ticket for you. I will
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meet
you at the north bus station. The day
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before
an
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event
we
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purchase
groceries for our items.
Also
, bring
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some
money and winter clothes with you
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because
we will spend
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some
precious time together.

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See
you
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soon
. Give my regards to my beloved uncle and aunt.

Best wishes,

Tom Smith

IELTS letter You recently went to a public event that ypu think your friend would enjoy. Write a letter to a friend

Letter
  American English
8 paragraphs
209 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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