Do you want to improve your writing? Try our new evaluation service and get detailed feedback.
Check Your Text it's free

You recently went to a concert and thought one of the singers was very good. You want to tell how you feel. Write a letter to the singer. In your letter: say how you feel about his/her performance give details of your music-related activities explain how you would like him/her to help you with your music-related activities

You recently went to a concert and thought one of the singers was very good. You want to tell how you feel. Write a letter to the singer. In your letter: say how you feel about his/her performance give details of your music-related activities explain how you would like him/her to help you with your music-related activities bjNW
Dear Mr. Knight, I am writing this letter to inform you that I attended one of your concerts which was held on 19th March at Rose Stadium. Your performance was amazing and I really enjoyed a lot especially the song ‘Gotta Go’. I used to listen your songs everyday and it was always my dreamt that I could see you while performing a live and I think it is fulfill now. I also want to share with you my music related activities like I used to play a piano and I also participate in singing competition every year in my school. I love to write lyrics and make compositions of my own written songs. I have written 10 songs already but I have some difficulties of making compositions. As I know that compositions of your songs are fabulous and people are also love to listen your songs. I would request you to give me some tips and tricks that how I can improve it. I would be very grateful If you help me with this. Hope to hear from you soon Yours sincerely, Preet
Dear Mr. Knight,

I am writing this letter to inform you that I attended one of your concerts which
was held
on 19th March at Rose Stadium. Your performance was amazing and I
really
enjoyed a lot
especially
the song ‘Gotta Go’. I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
used
to listen your songs
'Everyday' is an adjective. Did you mean "every day"?
everyday
and it was always my dreamt that I could
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
see
you while performing a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
live
and I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
think
it is
Consider using a past participle here: "fulfilled".
fulfill
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
now
.

I
also
want to share with you my music related activities like I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
used
to play a piano and I
also
participate in singing competition every year in my school.
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
love
to write lyrics and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
compositions of my
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
own
written songs.
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
have written 10 songs already
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
I have
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
difficulties of making compositions.

As I know that compositions of your songs are fabulous and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
are
also
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
love
to listen your songs. I would request you to give me
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
tips and tricks that how I can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
improve
it. I would be
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
Please add a punctuation mark at the end of paragraph
grateful


“If” at the beginning of a sentence usually requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
If
you
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
me with this.

Hope to hear from you
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
soon


Yours
sincerely
,

Possible spelling mistake found.
Preet

IELTS letter You recently went to a concert and thought one of the singers was very good. You want to tell how you feel. Write a letter to the singer. In your letter: say how you feel about his/her performance give details of your music-related activities explain how you would like him/her to help you with your music-related activities

Letter
  American English
8 paragraphs
183 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • ?
    Include an introduction and conclusion
  • ?
    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • ?
    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • ?
    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
Labels Descriptions
  • ?
    Currently is not available
  • Meet the criteria
  • Doesn't meet the criteria
Recent posts





Get more results for topic:
  • You recently went to a concert and thought one of the singers was very good. You want to tell how you feel. Write a letter to the singer. In your letter: say how you feel about his/her performance give details of your music-related activities explain how you would like him/her to help you with your music-related activities