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There is a public park near where you live. You have heard that the local council wants to sell this park. Write a letter to a local newspaper. In your letter: introduce yourself describe the importance of the park say what action you will take if the council continues with its plan

There is a public park near where you live. You have heard that the local council wants to sell this park. Write a letter to a local newspaper. In your letter: introduce yourself describe the importance of the park say what action you will take if the council continues with its plan LQDV
Dear Sir, I am writing to inquire about the public park that is going to sell by local council. My name is Aman and I am a resident of Model Town colony, London. I am living in this area since my birth, my parents moved into this colony due to speciality of this area. This area has a huge park at the center of this colony where most of the kids, youngsters and old age people spend their majority of the time during evening. This park is very vast in land, it has many green trees and fountains. There is circular pathway around the park where most of the folk walk as well as jog. Also, it contains some rides especially for the children. However, it must be advertised in newspaper so that everyone become aware of it. They are planning to build a supermarket at this location which will effect in the living of local residents. Yours faithfully, Aman
Dear Sir,

I am writing to inquire about the public
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park
that is
going to sell by local council. My name is
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
Aman and
I am a resident of Model Town colony, London. I am living in this area since my birth, my parents
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moved
into this colony due to
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speciality
of this area.

This area has a huge
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
park
at the center of this colony where most of the kids, youngsters and
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
old
age
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
spend their majority of the time during evening. This
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
park
is
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
vast in land, it has
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
green trees and fountains. There is circular pathway around the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
park
where most of the folk walk
as well
as jog.
Also
, it contains
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
rides
especially
for the children.

However
, it
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
must
be advertised
in newspaper
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
that everyone become aware of it. They are planning to build a supermarket at this location which will
Did you mean "affect"?
effect
in the living of local residents.

Yours
faithfully
,

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Aman

IELTS letter There is a public park near where you live. You have heard that the local council wants to sell this park. Write a letter to a local newspaper. In your letter: introduce yourself describe the importance of the park say what action you will take if the council continues with its plan

Letter
  American English
6 paragraphs
159 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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