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You recently transferred money into your bank account through online banking but the money was not credited to your account. Write a letter to your bank manager. In your letter, introduce yourself describe the situation tell what you want him to do

You recently transferred money into your bank account through online banking but the money was not credited to your account. Write a letter to your bank manager. In your letter, introduce yourself describe the situation tell what you want him to do qowa
Dear Sir or Madam, My name is Roger Smith and I am an existing account holder of Standard Chartered Bank in your branch. I am your bank's customer since the last 10 years, so that would make me your privileged client. Whilst I was enjoying your services very satisfactorily over the years, recently I experienced a major issue which I want to report to you for its resolution. I used your website to wire transfer money to a business associate and followed all instructions of the process religiously. When I completed the transaction, although I received a success notification, still the amount did not show up in my contact's account. Needless to say, this is a very serious problem having a big financial implication for me. I would request you to verify the transaction and ensure that the correct amount does reach the intended beneficiary account. Since I need to purchase a gift item for my wife before her birthday which is the day after tomorrow with this transfer, I would be highly obliged if you can expedite the correction. Yours faithfully Roger Smith
Dear Sir or Madam,

My name is Roger
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
Smith and
I am an existing account holder of Standard Chartered Bank in your branch. I am your bank's customer since the last 10 years,
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so
that would
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make
me your privileged client.

Whilst I was enjoying your services
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very
satisfactorily
over the years, recently I experienced a major issue which I want to report to you for its resolution. I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
used
your website to wire transfer money to a business associate and followed all instructions of the process
religiously
. When I completed the transaction, although I received a success notification,
still
the amount did not
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
show
up in my contact's account. Needless to say, this is a
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
serious problem having a
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
big
financial implication for me.

I would request you to verify the transaction and ensure that the correct amount does reach the intended beneficiary account. Since I need to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
purchase
a gift item for my wife
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
before
her birthday which is the day after tomorrow with this transfer, I would be
highly
obliged if you can expedite the correction.

Yours
faithfully


Roger Smith
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IELTS letter You recently transferred money into your bank account through online banking but the money was not credited to your account. Write a letter to your bank manager. In your letter, introduce yourself describe the situation tell what you want him to do

Letter
  American English
5 paragraphs
183 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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