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You recently saw an advert for art classes at a local college and you are interested in attending. Write to the college admissions officer to ask for some more information. In your letter: 1. Explain your previous experience of art. 2. Say why you are interested in joining the class. 3. Ask for more information about the classes.

You recently saw an advert for art classes at a local college and you are interested in attending. Write to the college admissions officer to ask for some more information. In your letter: 1. Explain your previous experience of art. 2. Say why you are interested in joining the class. 3. Ask for more information about the classes. g5X7l
Dear Mr Gunton, I am writing to enquire about the further information of your newly-opened art class. Majoring in architecture, I had had three years experience joining your Artist Training Programme previously, and therefore have a good command of not only sketch designing but software operation. However, according to the admission requirements of my ideal graduate school, which emphasizes the versatility of applicants, proficiency in sculpting is needed as well. As such, only by taking related training courses can qualify me to compete with other candidates in due course. Consequently, your art class with sculpture tops my priority. I wonder whether there is space available. If so, I would like to know when the curriculum commences and how much you charge per person? Furthermore, since I am a patron, would you kindly offer some discounts? Please reply to me at your earliest convenience to confirm the details. Yours sincerely, Patty Wong
Dear Mr
Gunton
,

I am writing to
enquire
about the
further
information of your
newly
-opened art
class
.

Majoring in architecture, I had had three years experience joining your Artist Training
Programme
previously, and
therefore
have a
good
command of not
only
sketch designing
but
software operation.

However
, according to the admission requirements of my ideal graduate school, which emphasizes the versatility of applicants, proficiency in sculpting
is needed
as well
. As such,
only
by taking related training courses can qualify me to compete with other candidates in due course.
Consequently
, your art
class
with sculpture tops my priority.

I wonder whether there is space available. If
so
, I would like to know when the curriculum commences and how much you charge per person?
Furthermore
, since I am a patron, would you kindly offer
some
discounts?

Please
reply to me at your earliest convenience to confirm the
details
.

Yours
sincerely
,

Patty Wong
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IELTS letter You recently saw an advert for art classes at a local college and you are interested in attending. Write to the college admissions officer to ask for some more information. In your letter: 1. Explain your previous experience of art. 2. Say why you are interested in joining the class. 3. Ask for more information about the classes.

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