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You recently received an invitation for three day training program which should benefit you and the company. Write a letter to your manager and say. Ask To attend this program Describe the program Explain how the will benefit the company

You recently received an invitation for three day training program which should benefit you and the company. Write a letter to your manager and say. Ask To attend this program Describe the program Explain how the will benefit the company dopQ7
Dear sir, I am writing, seek your approval for joining and intensive training programme in personality development and relationship building. I am recently promoted as functional assistant manager in Human Resource Department, I personally feel lacking behind in many traits such as relationship management and teamwork. Since these traits are Must for my profile, would be grateful if you allow me to attend a training session, I recently got invited for. It is a three day program, commencing on 5th June at Hotel Hamilton, organised by Young Aspirants Teaching Consultancy. The program will start with an orientation session, constituting indepth description of traits required to enhance professionalism. Next two days are fixed for practical teaching related exercises specially designed to promote teamwork and relationship management. Program will not only be beneficial for me at personal level but will also help me to benefit company; as after developing these skills I will be able to make better connections with companies clients and will effectively deal with interpersonal issues in company. I hope you will think upon my request and respond in positive way. Yours faithfully
Dear sir,

I am writing, seek your approval for joining and intensive training
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programme
in personality development and relationship building.

I am recently promoted as functional assistant manager in Human Resource Department, I
personally
feel lacking behind in
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many
traits such as relationship management and teamwork. Since these traits are
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Must
for my profile, would be grateful if you
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allow
me to attend a training session, I recently
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got
invited for. It is a
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three day
program, commencing on 5th June at Hotel Hamilton,
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organised
by Young Aspirants Teaching Consultancy. The program will
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start
with an orientation session, constituting
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indepth
description of traits required to enhance professionalism.
Next
two days are
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fixed
for practical teaching related exercises
specially
designed to promote teamwork and relationship management.

Program will not
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only
be beneficial for me at personal level
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but
will
also
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help
me to benefit
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company
; as after developing these
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skills
I will be able to
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make
better connections with
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companies
clients and will
effectively
deal with interpersonal issues in
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company
.

I hope you will
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think
upon my request and respond in
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positive
way.

Yours
faithfully
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IELTS letter You recently received an invitation for three day training program which should benefit you and the company. Write a letter to your manager and say. Ask To attend this program Describe the program Explain how the will benefit the company

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