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You recently received a letter from a friend asking for advise whether to go to college or try to get a job. You think he/she should get a job. Write a letter to this friend. In your letter 1. Say why he/she would not enjoy going to college. 2. Explain why getting a job is a good idea for him/her 3. Suggest types of job that would be suitable for him.her.

You recently received a letter from a friend asking for advise whether to go to college or try to get a job. You think he/she should get a job. Write a letter to this friend. In your letter 1. Say why he/she would not enjoy going to college. 2. Explain why getting a job is a good idea for him/her 3. Suggest types of job that would be suitable for him. her. jmwN
Dear Sakshi, I recently received your letter asking for advise about whether to go to college or to get a job so I reply to your letter. Firstly, I would suggest you do job instead of going to college at this time. When I last met you, I noticed that you were struggling with your studies because your college fee was not paid, and you were disturbed mentally. In addition, your parents are also not financially strong to help you with that. In that case, I would suggest you to quit your studies for some time and start doing job. Secondly, If you will be employed, you can pay for all your expenses such as, house rent, electricity bill, groceries and your other expenses as well. This action will also help your parents financially and you also will be independent enough to pay your college fee from your savings. At last, I will advise you to try to find an employment in IT sector because as I know, you have a good command in computer handling works. Moreover, IT sector gives a good amount of salary packages too. I hope you will like my suggestion and you will think once about it. Sending you lots of love to you and hope to meet you soon. Yours sincerely, Nidhi
Dear
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Sakshi
,

I recently received your letter asking for advise about whether to go to college or to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
a job
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
I reply to your letter.
Firstly
, I would suggest you do job
instead
of going to college at this time. When I last met you, I noticed that you were struggling with your studies
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
your college fee was not paid, and you
were disturbed
mentally.
In addition
, your parents are
also
not
financially
strong to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
you with that.
In that case
, I would suggest you to quit your studies for
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
time and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
start
doing job.

Secondly
, If you will
be employed
, you can pay for all your expenses such as,
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
house
rent, electricity bill, groceries and your other expenses
as well
. This action will
also
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
your parents
financially
and you
also
will be independent
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
enough
to pay your college fee from your savings.

At last, I will advise you to try to find an employment in IT sector
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
as I know, you have a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
command in computer handling works.
Moreover
, IT sector gives a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
amount of salary packages too.

I hope you will like my suggestion and you will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
think
once about it. Sending you lots of
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
love
to you and hope to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
meet
you
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
soon
.

Yours
sincerely
,

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Nidhi

IELTS letter You recently received a letter from a friend asking for advise whether to go to college or try to get a job. You think he/she should get a job. Write a letter to this friend. In your letter 1. Say why he/she would not enjoy going to college. 2. Explain why getting a job is a good idea for him/her 3. Suggest types of job that would be suitable for him. her.

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