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You recently received a letter from a friend asking for advice about whether to go to college or to try to get a job. You think he or she should get a job. Write a letter to your friend, in your letter, a) Why he / she would not enjoy going college. b) Explain why getting a job is a good idea for him /her c) Suggest a time job that would be suitable for him/her

Dear Jack, I hope this letter will find you in best of health and spirit. I received you letter last week stating that your MBA course work has finished at college and now you have to submit some final assignments before the exam. I would like to advise you that you should now stop going college because it would only the wastage of time. Rather you should start some job that will help you to promote you further in your career. You mentioned that classes are limited, because most of the course work has completed and attendance is quite low. Therefore, I would suggest that you should also not go to college now because it would waste your time. Although college has been good palace to meet and greet the friends and enjoy a quality time with them but now its time to start a career. A job immediately after college, without any break, will help you to enjoy a better career growth, because everything you studied is fresh in your mind. Moreover, starting a job will help you to learn more skills and improve your personality. As a career beginner, you should try to find some job with basic responsibilities like joiner book keeper or account technician. These early career jobs are very important because it will help you understanding whole accounting cycle from its very beginning. Hope this will help you to decide better. Best Regards, Sajjad

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Best Regards,

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