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You saw a job advertisement in magazine family looking for some one to live with them and take care of six years old child. Explain why you would like this job and why you would be suitable for this job and how you would spend your free time while you are in Australia

am writting this letter regard job advertisement. Which I saw in magazin yesterday. I am interested in the job and I think I will be suitable for the job. Firstly, I am really interested and excited for the job. The location of yours home is near to my college where I am studying English for next six month. My classes in college will held from next week and I had taken I am writ ting this letter regard job advertisement. Which I saw in magazin yesterday. I am interested in the job and I think I will be suitable for the job. Firstly, I am really interested and excited for the job. The location of yours home is near to my college where I am studying English for next six month. My classes in college will held from next week and I had taken evening classes so I had a lot of time in morning and in night to take care of kid. previously I did childcare in my home countr. I really like working with kids and my experience make me a strong candidate for this job. Additionaly, I am discipline and home oriented. This oppounity will help me to improve my English and give me an oppunity to know more about local culture. In my free time, I will be travelling and exploring the countr. My hobbie is cooking so, I can help in preparing some meal for family as well.
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job
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think
I will be suitable for the job.

Firstly
, I am
really
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interested
and excited for the
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job
. The location of yours home is near to my college where I am studying English for
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next
six month. My classes in college will held from
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next
week and I had taken I am writ ting this letter regard
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job
advertisement.
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Which
I
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saw
in
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magazin
yesterday. I am
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interested
in the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
job
and I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
think
I will be suitable for the job.

Firstly
, I am
really
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
interested
and excited for the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
job
. The location of yours home is near to my college where I am studying English for
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
next
six month. My classes in college will held from
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next
week and I had taken evening classes
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so
I had
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a lot of
time in morning and in night to take care of kid.
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previously
I did childcare in my home
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countr
. I
really
like working with kids and my experience
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make
me a strong candidate for this job.

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Additionaly
, I am discipline and home oriented. This
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oppounity
will
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help
me to
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improve
my English and give me an
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oppunity
to know more about local culture. In my free time, I will be travelling and exploring the
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countr
. My
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hobbie
is cooking
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, I can
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in preparing
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meal for family
as well
.

IELTS letter You saw a job advertisement in magazine family looking for some one to live with them and take care of six years old child. Explain why you would like this job and why you would be suitable for this job and how you would spend your free time while you are in Australia

Letter
  American English
4 paragraphs
243 words
5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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