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You recently ordered something online. When the delivery came it was not complete. Write a letter to the company. In your letter:

You recently ordered something online. When the delivery came it was not complete. Write a letter to the company. In your letter: 9Vaw
Dear Sir /Madam, I am writing in regards with a recently purchased 42-inch LED T. V. from your online store on the 2nd of March 2019. The order number is PQU331242 and my customer identification number is drp554435. Though, the television was delivered correctly, but the remote-control for the T. V. was missing. Although the television works, it has been very inconvenient to operate it without the remote-control. I have an elderly mother who watches the television regularly and it has been very difficult for her to manually operate it. Moreover, some of the features like setting the picture resolution and quality of the audio are not accessible without the remote. It has been three days since the television was delivered. Hence, I would like you to send me a new remote control within two days at maximum. Please send me an acknowledgment for this letter from your customer service as well. Awaiting for your reply as soon as possible. Yours Sincerely, Mark Roberts
Dear Sir /Madam,

I am writing in regards with a recently
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purchased
42-inch LED T. V. from your

online store on the 2nd of March 2019.

The order number is PQU331242 and my customer identification number is

drp554435. Though, the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
television
was delivered
correctly
,
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but
the remote-control

for the T. V. was missing.

Although the
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television
works, it has been
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
inconvenient to operate it without

the remote-control. I have an elderly mother who
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watches
the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
television
regularly


and it has been
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
difficult for her to
manually
operate it.
Moreover
,
If the text is a generality, 'of the' is not necessary. Did you mean "some"?
some of the


features like setting the picture resolution and quality of the audio are not accessible

without the remote. It has been three days since the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
television
was delivered
.
Hence
, I would like you to

This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
send
me a new remote control within two days at maximum.
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Please
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send
me an

acknowledgment for this letter from your customer service
as well
.

Did you mean "awaiting" or "waiting for"?
Awaiting for
your reply as
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
soon
as possible.

Yours
Sincerely
,

Mark Roberts

IELTS letter You recently ordered something online. When the delivery came it was not complete. Write a letter to the company. In your letter:

Letter
  American English
7 paragraphs
163 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Lexical Resource: 6.0
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