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You eat at your college cafeteria every lunchtime. However, you think it needs some improvements. Write a letter to the college magazine. In your letter, • explain what you like about the cafeteria • say what is wrong with it • suggest how it could be improved

You eat at your college cafeteria every lunchtime. However, you think it needs some improvements. Write a letter to the college magazine. In your letter, • explain what you like about the cafeteria • say what is wrong with it • suggest how it could be improved kGb8
Dear sir/ madam, I normally eat my launch at cafeteria because it is reasonable price as well I like friendly atmosphere. However, there are a lot of deficiencies which should be put right. Firstly, staff should clean table after every customer. There are a lot of people who do not complain it. I think due to less employee, they do not get time to clean it. So, cafeteria should hire more people. Secondly, some students who do not wait in queue to be served which is very annoying. In the summer, it is extremely hard to sit there due to bad ventilations. So there can be installed more window to keep it cool. College should also put some signs for garbage where student’s cam through it rather than on grounds which will help staff to clean it. I think college should charge fine to students who jump queue which will make them afraid to do this thing. Yours faithfully Baljeet Singh Aulakh
Dear sir/ madam,

I
normally
eat my launch at cafeteria
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because
it is reasonable price
as well
I like friendly atmosphere.

However
, there are
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a lot of
deficiencies which should
be put
right.
Firstly
, staff should clean table after every customer. There are
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
a lot of
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
who do not complain it. I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
think
due to less employee, they do not
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
time to clean it.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
So
, cafeteria should hire more
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
.
Secondly
,
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some
students who do not wait in queue to
be served
which is
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
annoying.

In the summer, it is
extremely
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
hard
to sit there due to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
bad
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ventilations
.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
So
there can
be installed
more window to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
keep
it cool. College should
also
put
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
signs for garbage where student’s cam through it
rather
than on grounds which will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
staff to clean it. I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
think
college should charge fine to students who jump queue which will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
them afraid to do this thing.

Yours
faithfully


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Baljeet
Singh
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Aulakh

IELTS letter You eat at your college cafeteria every lunchtime. However, you think it needs some improvements. Write a letter to the college magazine. In your letter, • explain what you like about the cafeteria • say what is wrong with it • suggest how it could be improved

Letter
  American English
5 paragraphs
161 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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