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You recently bought an expensive electronic product from a store, and found that the product does not work properly. Write a letter to the store manager. In your letter, Complain about the problem Propose action for the store to take Request confirmation that this is agreed

You recently bought an expensive electronic product from a store, and found that the product does not work properly. Write a letter to the store manager. In your letter, Complain about the problem Propose action for the store to take Request confirmation that this is agreed q2a5
Dear Mr/ Madam’ I have been a satisfied customer for several years, but I am writing regarding the product that I recently bought to your store, which is 60 inches flat screen television. The volume button is not partially working, as a result this problem caused a lot of wasted time and money to travel the electronic product to my location. I therefore request that you replaced the product immediately, or send a professional electronic technician to resolve the problem. Let me know what action you will taken, because I am only available on Monday next week. May you reply to this email to confirm you agreed to the conditions that I made. Thank you for your attention to this important matter Kind Regards Jay Ryan Arbiz
Dear Mr/ Madam’

I have been a satisfied customer for several years,
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but
I am writing regarding the product that I recently
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bought
to your store, which is
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60 inches
flat screen television. The volume button is not
partially
working,
as a result
this problem caused
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a lot of
wasted time and money to travel the electronic product to my location.

I
therefore
request that you replaced the product immediately, or
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
send
a professional electronic technician to resolve the problem.

This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
Let
me know what action you will
Did you mean "take" or "be taken"?
taken
,
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because
I am
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only
available on Monday
next
week.

May you reply to this email to confirm you
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agreed
to the conditions that I made.

Thank you for your attention to this
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important
matter

Kind Regards

Jay Ryan
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Arbiz

IELTS letter You recently bought an expensive electronic product from a store, and found that the product does not work properly. Write a letter to the store manager. In your letter, Complain about the problem Propose action for the store to take Request confirmation that this is agreed

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  American English
8 paragraphs
126 words
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less than 250 words in Task 2
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4.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Lexical Resource: 6.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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