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You recently moved house and you used a removal company to help you move your belongings. However, some of your things were damaged in the move. Write a letter to the manager of the removal company. In your letter • Give details of the move • Describe the damage • Say what you would like the manager to do

You recently moved house and you used a removal company to help you move your belongings. However, some of your things were damaged in the move. Write a letter to the manager of the removal company. In your letter • Give details of the move • Describe the damage • Say what you would like the manager to do n6Bye
Dear Sir, I recently moved house to nearby city with the help of your movers company. This is to inform you that some of my stuffs were damaged in the move. I have booked for both packing and moving with your company to help me with my belongings. The travel time to the destination is about couple of hours so I booked a truck as early as possible. Shifting house was made last week with one of your employee as he was very helpful with both packing and moving everything went as per plan however, some of my belongings were damaged in the move which I noticed later. So the stuffs likemassager, laptop and speaker were damaged heavily it costs me a lot of money which I never expected this to happen. Though the damage was made from your side I wanted you to know that this is entirely your responsibility to take care of whereas, I have already raised a complaint against your employee whom helped me to move on that day. To conclude I request a compensation of 15% from my booking package for the damage made from your side. Let me know if the offer is considerable so that we can proceed further. I'm happy to acknowledge your side of points so, hoping to receive response as soon as possible. Yours Thankfully, Paul
Dear Sir, I recently
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moved
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house
to nearby city with the
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help
of your movers
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company
. This is to inform you that
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some
of my stuffs
were damaged
in the
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move
. I have booked for both packing and moving with your
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company
to
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help
me with my belongings. The travel time to the destination is about
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couple of
hours
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so
I booked a truck as early as possible. Shifting
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house
was made
last week with one of your employee as he was
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very
helpful with both packing and moving everything went as per plan
however
,
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some
of my belongings
were damaged
in the
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move
which I noticed later.
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So
the stuffs
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likemassager
, laptop and speaker
were damaged
heavily
it costs me
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a lot of
money which I never
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expected
this to happen. Though the damage
was made
from your side I wanted you to know that this is
entirely
your responsibility to take care of whereas, I have already raised a complaint against your employee
Did you mean "who" instead of 'whom'?
whom
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helped
me to
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move
on that day.
To conclude
I request a compensation of 15% from my booking package for the damage made from your side.
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Let
me know if the offer is considerable
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so
that we can proceed
further
. I'm happy to acknowledge your side of points
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so
, hoping to receive response as
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soon
as possible.

Yours
Thankfully
, Paul

IELTS letter You recently moved house and you used a removal company to help you move your belongings. However, some of your things were damaged in the move. Write a letter to the manager of the removal company. In your letter • Give details of the move • Describe the damage • Say what you would like the manager to do

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  American English
2 paragraphs
225 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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Lexical Resource: 6.0
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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