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Dear Manager, I am writing this email regarding a recent job advertisement I came across in the Time Newspaper dated May 20. I would like to apply for the position of office co-ordinator at your Law Firm located at Chennai. I have over 5 years experience working as co-ordinator at ABC Private Ltd. I recently moved to Chennai to be near my family. My previous experience was at ABC Private Ltd at their Mumbai Headquarters. My daily activities included providing smooth on-boarding experience for new employees by making arrangements of the equipments required, interacting with vendors responsible for office maintenance and cafeteria, scheduling all hands meeting and client interactions for the firm. One of my main strengths is organizing things and and communication skills which is critical for handling things at a immigration firm. I am really looking forward to get a chance to prove my skills that could be benificial to the company. Looking forward to hear from you Thank you! ! Yours faithfully, Aravind

Dear Manager,

I am writing this email regarding a recent job advertisement I came across in the Time Newspaper dated May 20.

I would like to apply for the position of office Possible spelling mistake found.coordinator
co-ordinator
 at your Law Firm located at Chennai. Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
 have over 5 years experience working as Possible spelling mistake found.coordinator
co-ordinator
 at ABC Private Ltd. Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
 recently This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :relocated
moved
 to Chennai to be near my family.

My previous experience was at ABC Private Ltd at their Mumbai Headquarters. My daily activities included providing smooth on-boarding experience for new employees by making arrangements of the equipments required, interacting with vendors responsible for office maintenance and cafeteria, scheduling all hands meeting and client interactions for the firm.

One of my main strengths is organizing things Possible typo: you repeated a wordand
and and
 communication This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :proficiencies
skills
 which is critical for handling things at Use "an" instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'an
a
 immigration firm.

I am really
 looking forward to This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :acquire
get
 a chance to prove my This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :proficiencies
skills
 that could be Possible spelling mistake found.beneficial
benificial
 to the This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :enterprisecorporation
company
. Looking forward In the grammatical structure 'look + forward + to + verb', the verb 'to' is used with the gerund: "to hearing".to hearing
to hear
 from Please add a punctuation mark at the end of paragraphyou.you!you?you:you,you;
you


Thank you! !

Yours faithfully
,

Possible spelling mistake found.Arvind
Aravind

IELTS letter Job advertisement in newspaper

Letter

American English

9 paragraphs

165 words

5.0

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5

Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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One main idea per paragraph
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Include an introduction and conclusion
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Support main points with an explanation and then an example
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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Vary your linking phrases using synonyms

Lexical Resource: 5.5

Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
Check your writing for errors

Task Achievement: 5.0

Answer all parts of the question
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Present relevant ideas
Fully explain these ideas
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Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

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