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You recently entered a competition for learners of English. You have just received this letter from the organisers of the competition, on which you have written some notes.

You recently entered a competition for learners of English. You have just received this letter from the organisers of the competition, on which you have written some notes. 7raA3

Dear Mrs. Thompson, Thank you very much for the letter which I have received yesterday. I am cherished that I have won the prize. I would like to go to San Francisco because I never have been to the USA before. However, there are several questions I would like to ask. First of all, I would like to know whether the return flights us a direct or indirect flight. I would like to book a direct flight because it is much more convenient and comfortable. In addition, I would like to know how many hours a day it takes to study and if there are classes in the morning or the afternoon. You wrote about free accommodation with a family. I wonder the meals are included and if I have the opportunity to cook by myself? Finally, I would like to ask you if it is possible to stay for an extra week. If it is possible, please let me know the price I have to pay. I am truly grateful for your assistance. I look forward to hearing from you soon. Yours sincerely,

Dear Mrs. Thompson,

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very
 much for the letter which I have received yesterday. I am cherished
 that I have won the prize. I would like to go to San Francisco This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:due to the factin light of the fact thatowing to the fact that
because
 I Although not incorrect, the word order "have never" is preferred by native speakers.have never
never have
 been to the USA This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:previouslyprior to
before
. However
, there are several questions I would like to ask.

This phrase is redundant. Consider using "first".First
First of all
, I would like to know whether the return flights us a direct or indirect flight. I would like to book a direct flight This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:due to the factin light of the fact thatowing to the fact that
because
 it is much more convenient and comfortable.

In addition
, I would like to know how This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:a plethora ofa number ofnumerous
many
 hours a day it takes to study and if there are classes in the morning or the afternoon.

You wrote about free accommodation with a family. I wonder the meals are included
 and if I have the opportunity to cook by myself?

Finally
, I would like to ask you if it is possible to stay for an extra week. If it is possible, This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :satisfy
please
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :authorize
let
 me know the price I This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:ought to
have to
 pay.

I am truly
 grateful for your assistance. I look forward to hearing from you This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:in the near future
soon
.

Yours sincerely
, 