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To ask appologise your friend dont attend her party

To ask appologise your friend dont attend her party k5YYM
Dear Scarlet, What can I say, exept I am so sorry that I missed your birthday party last week due to my unexpected business trip. I hope you celebrated your birthday party extremely good and with your nearest, unfortunately I was unable to attend. I planned to participate your party and I took a gift for you but only a hours before my boss command to take off to Canada immediately and must take part in a job meeting. I am so sorry my friend and now if you consent I will preform evening party next Sunday in five star restaurant for to justify my guilt. I hope my apologies will be accepted. LovelySimona Addison
Dear Scarlet, What can I say,
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I am
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sorry that I missed your birthday
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party
last week due to my unexpected business trip. I hope you celebrated your birthday
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party
extremely
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good
and with your nearest, unfortunately I was unable to attend. I planned to participate your
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party
and I took a gift for you
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but
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Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean "a hour" or simply "hours"?
a hours
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before
my boss command to take off to Canada immediately and
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must
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take part
in a job meeting.
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I
am
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so
sorry my friend and
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now
if you consent I will preform evening
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party
next
Sunday in
'five star' is missing a hyphen.
five star
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restaurant
for to justify my guilt.
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I
hope my apologies will be
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accepted
.
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LovelySimona
Please add a punctuation mark at the end of paragraph
Addison

IELTS letter To ask appologise your friend dont attend her party

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  American English
1 paragraphs
114 words
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less than 250 words in Task 2
and less than 150 words in Task 1
4.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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