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You recently did a short cookery course. The cookery school has asked for your feedback on this course

You recently did a short cookery course. The cookery school has asked for your feedback on this course Jo6Wk
Dear Sir, I had received a request for providing the feedback for the cookery course in Baking. I had enrolled last month with your cookery school and that was one of the best decisions I have made in my life. The best thing I liked about the course was the way in which it was planned. Even a fresher like me, who had no knowledge about baking, learnt so many things. Also, the whole team of your school made everyone comfortable right from day one and that created bonding amongst us. After completion of course, I have become an entrepreneur and have started a cake shop in Phoenix Mall with the name “Cakery Bakery”. It’s too early to say but people have liked my bakery products and I have been kept busy with the Christmas Cake orders. A recommendation for your school is to start the cookery course on Continental Dishes. It’s an untouched avenue and people like me would like to learn and explore this cuisine. Overall, I am satisfied with the course along with its content and surely will recommend it to my friends, family and neighbours. Thanking you, Yours sincerely, Mary Jane
Dear Sir,

I had received a request for providing the feedback for the cookery
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
course
in Baking. I had enrolled last month with your cookery school and that was one of the best decisions I have made in my life.

The best thing I liked about the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
course
was the way in which it
was planned
. Even a fresher like me, who had no knowledge about baking,
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learnt
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
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many
things.
Also
, the whole team of your school made everyone comfortable right from day one and that created bonding amongst us.

After completion of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
course
, I have become an entrepreneur and have
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
started
a cake shop in Phoenix Mall with the name “
Possible spelling mistake found.
Cakery
Bakery”. It’s too early to say
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
have liked my bakery products and I have been
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
kept
busy with the Christmas Cake orders.

A recommendation for your school is to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
start
the cookery
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
course
on Continental Dishes. It’s an untouched avenue and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
like me would like to learn and explore this cuisine.

Overall
, I
am satisfied
with the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
course
along with its content and
surely
will recommend it to my friends, family and
Possible spelling mistake. 'neighbours' is British English.
neighbours
.

Thanking you,

Yours
sincerely
,

Mary Jane

IELTS letter You recently did a short cookery course. The cookery school has asked for your feedback on this course

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  American English
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194 words
6.0
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