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You recently celebrated a special occasion in your personal life and received a card and a present from your colleagues at work. Write a letter to your colleagues. In your letter remind your colleagues what the special occasion you were celebrating was thank them for the card and gift explain why you like the gift and how you will use it

You recently celebrated a special occasion in your personal life and received a card and a present from your colleagues at work. Write a letter to your colleagues. In your letter remind your colleagues what the special occasion you were celebrating was thank them for the card and gift explain why you like the gift and how you will use it Q3x1
Dear Amrita team, I am writing this letter to express my satisfaction about the gifts, you people have presented to my daughter on her special day. Hope you all remember that 3. 3. 2021 was her birthday and was conducted at the Town Hall, Trivandrum. With all of yours physical presence as well as gifts had made my day more memorable. I would like to thank each one of you, for making the time and attending the party on time. My child is very happy that she got a huge Santa Claus toy as one of the gift and also really was surprised to see the gift card to M. G. M Amusement park. Once again thank you for your gifts and valuable timings for spending with our family. Like I already told you, my daughter was amused with the gifts you gave her, the happiness in her eyes have made my day as well. In fact she was wanting this toy from last Christmas onwards, but I would not find a big one like this in any of the online sites and physical stores. As she wanted to this doll for her annual day function, as she is going to present a puppet show on the day. Thank you for such a useful gifts. Thanking you. Yours sincerely, Renjith
Dear Amrita team,

I am writing this letter to express my satisfaction about the
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gifts
, you
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people
have presented to my daughter on her special day. Hope you all remember that 3. 3. 2021 was her birthday and
was conducted
at the Town Hall, Trivandrum. With all of yours physical presence
as well
as
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gifts
had made my day more memorable.

I would like to thank each one of you, for making the time and attending the party on time. My child is
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very
happy that she
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
got
a huge Santa Claus toy as one of the
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gift
and
also
really
was surprised
to
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see
the
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gift
card to M. G. M Amusement park. Once again thank you for your
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gifts
and valuable timings for spending with our family.

Like I already
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told
you, my daughter
was amused
with the
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gifts
you gave her, the happiness in her eyes have made my day
as well
. In
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fact she
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was wanting
this toy from last Christmas onwards,
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but
I would not find a
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big
one like this in any of the online sites and physical stores. As she wanted to this doll for her annual day function, as she is going to present a puppet
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show
on the day. Thank you for such a useful gifts.

Thanking you.

Yours
sincerely
,

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Renjith
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IELTS letter You recently celebrated a special occasion in your personal life and received a card and a present from your colleagues at work. Write a letter to your colleagues. In your letter remind your colleagues what the special occasion you were celebrating was thank them for the card and gift explain why you like the gift and how you will use it

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